Talk:Riverside Park (Manhattan)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:00, 9 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

• "Riverside Park has many..." needs a period.
  •  Done
• I'm not familiar with "land condemnation", I Googled it and Eminent domain seemed like a reasonable link for it?
  •  Added
• The area seems to be only mentioned once, unreferenced in the infobox (and to three d.p for acres, yet whole hectares...)
  •  Fixed And it was the wrong area to boot. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
• "191 acres (0.77 km2) " I would use hectares here instead of km2.
  •  Done
• "By the 1850s, the city was" reiterate NYC.
  •  Done
• "was slow to come" just slow, or slower?
  •  Fixed It was "slower" to come. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
• "the Hudson River.[4][5][6][8]" four cites really needed for this one claim?
  •  Condensed
• "Circa 1890" not the greatest descriptive caption I've ever seen...
  •  Fixed
• "in 1880[16][21] and instantly" awkward ref placement, and I imagine "quickly" is more accurate than "instantly".
  •  Moved
• "starting with " redundant.
  •  Removed
• "though the monuments did fit in with the park aesthetic" according to whom?
  •  Added
• "Trains travel through..." needs a period.
  •  Done
• "was $11 million" non-breaking space between 11 and million, and consider inflation.
  •  Done
• "would disband in" just "disbanded in" would be fine.
  •  Done
• "the park[104] and" awkward, move to end of sentence.
  •  Done
• " a couple hundred " not encyclopedic in tone. Do you mean "approximately 200"?
  •  Done Added a more exact number. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
• "area co-ops " I assume you mean co-operatives?
  •  Done
• "new Riverside Park South, s" why italics?
  •  Removed
• " new bike path" cycle path.
  • Actually, in the US they are generally called bike or bicycle paths. So I went with the latter. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
• "started in August 2016.[125] " still ongoing?
  • Yes, the first phase opened in 2019. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
• "A bike bypass " cycle.
  • See above.
• "of the bike bypass " no need to repeat.
  •  Done
• 72nd and 125th Street are overlinked.
• As is Riverbank State Park.
• "The uppermost register, " no need to repeat register here.
• Hudson River Park and Battery Park and Fort Washington Park are all overlinked.
  •  Removed all.
• Is it "Fireman's Memorial" or Fireman's Memorial?
• Check other monument names, for whether they should be in italics.
  •  Done Italicized appropriately, but most of these are not italicized, for some reason. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Age." [156] " remove space before ref.
  •  Done
• Grant's Tomb, Ulysses S. Grant and National Park Service are overlinked.
• "andmark[162] and a national" awkward.
  •  Moved
• "Soldiers' and Sailors' Monument" and "NYC Parks" are overlinked.
• NYC Parks is overlinked three further times before the end of the article.
  • I hope I got all the overlinks. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
• cafe or café?
  • Cafe. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
• "110th-111th" etc, en-dashes.
  •  Done
• Basketball, tennis and volleyball overlinked. Questionable if they need to be linked at all really.
• Soccer is also overlinked.
  •  Removed both.
• "dozens of fun events for all " not an advert.
  •  Removed
• "Red-tailed hawk in Riverside Park" might be nice to mention this in the prose, and link the species.
  •  Done
• NYC subway overlinked.
  •  Removed
• "Giuliani, a wild turkey resident in the park" why is this see also and not mentioned in the article at all?
  •  Added to the article. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
• Spaced hyphens in the ref titles should be en-dashes.
  •  Done
• A.L., E.P. - I think most recent advice is to space these A. L. and E. P.
  • Expanded the author names. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

That's all I have here, on hold. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 07:57, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

The Rambling Man, thanks for the review. I have addressed some of the preceding points and will shortly address the rest. epicgenius (talk) 19:46, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: I think I have tackled all of these now. epicgenius (talk) 21:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

Marvellous, good work, promoting. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:38, 11 April 2020 (UTC)

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