Talk:Rise Against Hunger

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Lightoil in topic Rise Against Hunger page edit

Puff piece

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Recent changes have left this piece lookign a little unencyclopedic, I'm about to go through the article and remove some of the excessive flattery. This is not because I don't think the organisation does good work but I thought I'd leave a note here. I may miss comments so please use the {{tping}} template to contact me. SPACKlick (talk) 14:05, 14 May 2014 (UTC)Reply

Actually, it's better than it was...

Still pretty puffy! I'm going to take out some of the obviously subjective language like "life-changing". Vanillabean43 (talk) 21:06, 21 February 2020 (UTC)Reply

Edits to page

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Hello, I tried making changes yesterday and noticed all edits were reverted. Changes made were to update/adjust details that are listed more accurately and outdated information such as Rise Against Hunger's mission statement. Can someone point me in the right direction to get changes/made updated. Thank you! AWhitmyer (talk) 16:07, 29 March 2023 (UTC)Reply

AWhitmer, please read Wikipedia:Avoid mission statements. Wikipedia articles about an organization should be based primarily on summarizing what published reliable sources that are entirely independent of the group say about the group. Going forward, you should use the formal Edit request process, which will draw the attention of uninvolved editors. Cullen328 (talk) 18:02, 11 April 2023 (UTC)Reply
Thank you for these details! Appreciate it. AWhitmyer (talk) 19:00, 11 April 2023 (UTC)Reply

Update first two sentences in the first paragraph

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  • What I think should be changed: Update the first two sentences in the first paragraph to the following:

Rise Against Hunger is an international humanitarian nonprofit that coordinates the packaging and distribution of food and other aid to people in developing nations. Driven by the vision of a world without hunger, Rise Against Hunger is growing a global movement to end hunger by empowering communities, nourishing lives and responding to emergencies.

  • Why it should be changed: Missing information about other pathways that end global hunger.
  • References supporting the possible change (format using the "cite" button): Cite error: There are <ref> tags on this page without content in them (see the help page).https://www.guidestar.org/profile/16-1541024Cite error: There are <ref> tags on this page without content in them (see the help page).

AWhitmyer (talk) 14:07, 14 April 2023 (UTC)Reply

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  Not done: While a noble goal, Driven by the vision of a world without hunger, Rise Against Hunger is growing a global movement to end hunger by empowering communities, nourishing lives and responding to emergencies is not neutrally-worded. HouseBlastertalk 18:02, 17 April 2023 (UTC)Reply

Rise Against Hunger page edit

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  • What I think should be changed: I’d like to please update the intro sentence to the following: Rise Against Hunger is an international humanitarian nonprofit organization with a mission to grow a global movement to end hunger by empowering communities, nourishing lives and responding to emergencies.
  • Why it should be changed: To ensure that accurate details about Rise Against Hunger are reflected on the page.
  • References supporting the possible change (format using the "cite" button): Cite error: There are <ref> tags on this page without content in them (see the help page).https://www.guidestar.org/profile/16-1541024Cite error: There are <ref> tags on this page without content in them (see the help page).

SummerZoe (talk) 01:47, 26 April 2023 (UTC)Reply

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  Not done: Too promotional, fails WP:NPOV. Lightoil (talk) 03:53, 26 April 2023 (UTC)Reply