Talk:Richard Henry Park/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:56, 27 October 2020 (UTC)

Going to be reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 20:56, 27 October 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• Wikilink Vice President of the United States

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:45, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "He did a sculpture of Milwaukee's first white settler and first mayor. He also created sculptures for the Chicago World's Fair of 1893." - consider merging these two sentences together

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:45, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Life and career

• "Park was born February 17, 1838," - born on February

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "working as an assistant to Palmer[3] alongside other future sculptors Launt Thompson[4] and Charles Calverley.[5]" - commas will be need to be added before each of the citations

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "He moved to New York city to establish an independent career before moving to Florence, Italy around 1871." - the word in bold begins with a capital letter

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink Milwaukee on the first mention
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "Park's early work was in marble, later changing to the medium of bronze for natural sculptures, in line with the American trend for late nineteenth century sculptures." - sentence will need to be verified by a reliable source
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "he moved his studio to Chicago to get commissions in the sculptural programs for the Chicago World's Fair of 1893." - wikilink the text in bold to the appropriate article
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "Park's apprentice and assistant (1891-1894)." - assistant from 1891 to 1894.
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink Montana
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "Remarkably, given his history with the family," - the word highlighted in bold is non-netural
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink rotunda to [[Rotunda (architecture)}]
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "It has been suggested that Park's most enduring legacy may be his role as mentor and teacher to Lawrie." - suggested by whom?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:26, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "He is best known for his Actor's Monument to Edgar Allan Poe (1884) in the Metropolitan Museum of Art in New York city, and the Drake Fountain in Chicago (1892)." - sentence will require a reliable source to verify that it is correct

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:26, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• Also for the above sentence, the parentheses can be removed and the sentence be reworded accordingly

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:07, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "Dimmick's view is confirmed by his obituary in the Chicago Tribune dated November 8, 1902, which states he died "at the "Battle Creek sanitarium." - sentence needs to be verified by a reliable source

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:07, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• Chicago Tribune can be wikilinked

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:26, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Washington monument, 1885

• "at a cost of around $20,000[23]" - a comma is missing before the citation

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:42, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "restorer Andrzej Dajnowski discovered major cracking in one of the legs " - what caused the cracking?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:42, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Juneau Monument, 1887

• "having been the area's first white settler and the first Mayor of the city." - the city's first Mayor.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:09, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "The monument cost around $25,000 (equivalent to $641,000 in 2019)[24]" - a comma is missing before the citation

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:09, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "and depicts Juneau "clothed in the habit of the pioneer"[32]" - same issue as above

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:09, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• "Strong similarities have been noted between the sculpture's visage and that of Park's Washington statue." - noted by whom?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:09, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

References

• The hyphens in the number sections of References 3, 4, 5, 6 and 20 should be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:56, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Newspaper and web

• askArt ""Richard Park (1832-1902)"" - the hyphen needs to be replaced by an en dash

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:01, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• Be consistent in how Milwaukee Journal Sentinel is written; it should be either Milwaukee Journal Sentinel or The Milwaukee Journal Sentinel

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:01, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 08:08, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Working Thanks for review. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:15, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
• @MWright96: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:01, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

• @Doug Coldwell: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 19:53, 28 October 2020 (UTC)