Talk:Regolith-hosted rare earth element deposits

Feedback from Jupiter

Your page is clearly structured with good use of pictures and animations. The language is simple and the content is rich.

Here are some minor suggestions:

1. I really like your evolutionary diagrams, but you may want to enlarge the animation or the text size thereof.

2. It may be good to have a short last section about the application of REE, so your reader may know the usage of these type of material after "extraction" section.

Feedback from Blessing

Wow! I love your page, you really devoted your time to it. You may as well find my comments useful.

1. Your article does not have a title. Surprised?

2. In the definition of REE, you stated three terms or names that will adequately mean the same term as "Regolith-hosted rare earth element deposits". It will be good if you can add authors that first described them with such names. Ignore if that does not exit. Also a few grammatical corrections are needed.

3. There is a few repetitions of some words in paragraph one in paragraph two particularly when talking about distribution of REE. I suggest you move the last statement on distribution in the first paragraph to the second paragraph.

4. You should try and reorder some of the citation where two or more citations were used. Just a few of them!

5. Two of the drafted figures need to be vector diagrams. I guess you will work this out. At the final stage, I suggest you label it as a hypothetical or schematic diagrams since you are not referring to any specific regolith profile. It is also more attractive if all the figures all arranged in the right-hand side. Just my opinion!

6. I suggest you use or add specific date to the first statement on "modern mining method" where you said "In the last three decades" before as time passes by (let say in the next 10 years), three decades in your page will be a misinformation.

7. In some references, you did not make correction for the dates. Remember to edit them.

Regards! — Preceding unsigned comment added by BlessingAdeoti (talk • contribs) 10:26, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback from George

• try to keep the wording more factual than a narrative, using simple terminology where possible
• information on the uses of the rare earth elements could give a practical and relatable aspect to the page - maybe also an account of how geologic extraction has changed since its first discovery
• annotations labelling specific features of the photograph which could be related to the theoretic diagrams would be useful — Preceding unsigned comment added by Georgealee (talk • contribs) 16:20, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback from Harriet

Most concepts are well explained and the length of paragraphs are appropriate. Figures are understandable.
1. It may be better to add figures to illustrate you mining method part.
2. A brief introduction on what are rare-earth elements and 1-2 sentences on how important they may be easier for non-science readers to get a brief idea on what your page is about
3. You may want to enlarge the figures so that the texts are more readable.
HarrietHKUGeology (talk) 03:56, 23 October 2018 (UTC)

Reflection

Creating the wiki page does help me a lot in getting myself prepared for my final year project. Not only understanding the technical details of the topic, most importantly, I have also learnt the way of expressing difficult ideas in simpler terms and diagrams by thinking from the perspective of general public.

After reviewing my pages after the draft submission, I think more diagrams can be created to illustrate some processes (i.e. schematic diagram of the modern extraction technique of regolith-hosted REE deposits, ion-exchange process in leaching etc.)

At the same time, I have also received detailed and thoughtful ideas from my friends, esp Blessings, who had written a lot of useful suggestions I didn’t think of before. Some wordings that might potentially confuse the audience canbe amended while more sections can be added to make this more comprehensive. Kevnmh (talk) 03:23, 23 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedbacks (2nd)

Feedback from Yuwei

Hi Kevin, these are some suggestions for your page:

• I think you might misspell the word "ion-adsorption"?
• The words on the figures might be small for reading.
• In the "Extraction techniques" part, the subtitles are not in the same size (level?).

Feedback from Ivan

Hi Kevin! These are some suggestions for your article:

• You may replace the word "Geomorphology" by landform characteristics in case it is difficult to be understood.
• In the Geomorphology part, some lexical terms could be more generic. For example, you may summarise the first point as a relief factor and you could replace "densely-vegetated" by "dense plant growth".
• You may add more links redirecting to some provinces and countries like Jiangxi.
• You redirected more applications of REEs in the last paragraph of the Application part. It could be better to refer readers by stating it right after the subtitle like this:

Main article: Rare-earth element#List

• You may also rearrange the orders of some in-line references.

Cheers,
Ivan
Ivancyyip (talk) 14:17, 19 November 2018 (UTC)

Final reflection

Despite being a demanding task, wiki page is a very well designed coursework, especially when compared to those essays. We are well supported throughout the process in all aspects (e.g. English, Scinece etc.) which make things easier.

Most importantly, I have really gained a much better understanding of my final year project through reading papers and rewriting them in wiki. Moreover, I have learnt the way of expressing complicated ideas to laymen, which would help me a lot in my fyp presentation.

Compared to writing essays, creating a Wiki page is a very good experience to us. There are true readers and we are like really making some contributions to science. It also helps us with other courses, instead of being a normal assignment or group project, which are usually forgotten after finishing it. Kevnmh (talk) 04:57, 20 December 2018 (UTC)

Final reflection

Final reflection Despite being a demanding task, wiki page is a very well designed coursework, especially when compared to those essays. We are well supported throughout the process in all aspects (e.g. English, Scinece etc.) which make things easier.

Most importantly, I have really gained a much better understanding of my final year project through reading papers and rewriting them in wiki. Moreover, I have learnt the way of expressing complicated ideas to laymen, which would help me a lot in my fyp presentation.

Compared to writing essays, creating a Wiki page is a very good experience to us. There are true readers and we are like really making some contributions to science. It also helps us with other courses, instead of being a normal assignment or group project, which are usually forgotten after finishing it. Kevnmh (talk) 04:57, 20 December 2018 (UTC)

Kevnmh (talk) 05:15, 20 December 2018 (UTC)