Talk:Rebel Heart Tour (album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 17:54, 26 March 2018 (UTC)

Lead

• and songwriter Madonna. The album chronicles the singer's → Two clipped sentences that can be easily connected to "and songwriter Madonna, chronicling the singer's"
• September 15, 2017, by → you don't need the second comma
• and Eagle Records → ,and by Eagle Records
• Rebel Heart Tour is Madonna's fifth live album and contains bonus content like → Rebel Heart Tour also contains bonus content including
• In which year did Tears of a Clown occur?
• 22 song → 22-song
• Link "critics" to Music journalism
• who noted Madonna's live singing → who picked Madonna's live vocals
• in most of the nations → in most of the countries it charted in
• and top-ten of the album charts → as well as the top ten of the album charts
• won the category → won in the category

Infobox

• All seems to be on point here ;)

Background

• earning US$169.8 million, and was attended → earning US$169.8 million; it was attended (better wording here)
• Entertainment Weekly announced → Entertainment Weekly subsequently announced (better flow)
• it featured behind the scenes footage → it featured behind-the-scenes footage
• of the tour.[5] Billboard showcased an exclusive behind-the-scenes look for the tour on December 2. → of the tour,[5] which had been exclusively previewed by Billboard on December 2, 2016.
• as DVD, Blu-ray, and download → on DVD, Blu-ray and digital formats.
• digital formats.[9] It is Madonna's fifth live album and contains bonus content like the Tears of a Clown show at Melbourne's Forum Theatre, as well as a 22 song double CD → digital formats,[9] containing bonus content including the Tears of a Clown show at Melbourne's Forum Theatre in YEAR, as well as a 22-song double CD. (the fact that it is her 5th live album is irrelevant in the article's body)
• listed the total running time → listed the total running time of the album
• 2 hours → two hours
• The release was distributed → The release of Rebel Heart Tour was distributed
• for pre-order from August 16, 2017 → for pre-order on August 16, 2017

Critical response

• You need an overall sentence, such as "Upon its release, Rebel Heart Tour was met with generally positive reviews from music critics".
• and felt that the release was a → describing the release as a
• as well as fans who may have missed it, → this is completely irrelevant and should be removed
• 4 stars out of 5 → please write out the numbers
• saying that although Madonna's film career might not have been successful, "she knows → remove irelevant content about her unsuccessful film career and change into: saying that "[Madonna] knows
• He further complimented the production, the video quality and combined with the audio, recommended it for being → He further complimented the production, the video and the audio quality of the album, recommending it for being
• from Inquisitr gave positive review → from Inquisitr gave a positive review
• gave positive review for the live album of the release but criticized the DVD and Blu-ray versions of the release for poor editing. He declared Rebel Heart Tour as Madonna's best live album to date and found it better than the DVD and Blu-ray. → gave a positive review for Rebel Heart Tour, calling it Madonna's best live album to date, but criticized the poor editing of its DVD and Blu-ray versions.
• He complimented Madonna's live singing on the album and not using digital enhancement on her vocals → He also complimented Madonna's live, unprocessed vocals on the album.
• during the dance-oriented performances → during dance sequences
• from Attitude gave a positive review, describing the release → from Attitude commended the release, describing it
• complimenting the dancers and Madonna's footwork onstage → complimenting the dancers, Madonna's footwork onstage

Commercial reception

• I would rather rename the section into "Commercial performance", but it's your choice
• You need an overall sentence here as well, such as "The album attained commercial success following its premiere."
• It also reached number → The album also reached number (alternating words for better flow)
• Year of release for Precious Memories: Live at the Ryman in brackets
• number-one → number one
• In France, the live album reached → use "peaked at" here for alternation
• Link "SNEP Albums Chart" to "French Albums Chart"
• copies while the video versions topped the French DVD → comma before "while"
• certified the video Platinum → eventually certified... (for flow)
• Across Europe the album → Across the rest of Europe, the album
• top-ten of the charts → top ten of the charts
• won the category → won in the category
• Rename the section into "Commercial performance and accolades" because of the award

Track listing

• Flawless ;)

Personnel

• Credits adapted from Rebel Heart Tour liner notes → Credits adapted from the liner notes of Rebel Heart Tour
• Unlink "Madonna"

Charts

• Flawless ;)

Certifications

• Flawless ;)

Release history

• Flawless ;)

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 38.7% is still acceptable!

References

• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
• No dead links! Good job!

Outcome

@IndianBio: Hi there! This article requires a bit of work, but it could easily be brought to GA status. I have put it  On hold for 7 days to allow you work on the article in concordance with my comments above. Best regards and good luck; Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:00, 2 April 2018 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: I have addressed all comments, except the summary line that you had asked for in the beginning of the critical/commercial sections. Reason being since I could not find a source calling the album as "successful" or "received positive reviews", it did not feel correct to have a POV pushing statement. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 11:19, 3 April 2018 (UTC)

Gladly passing this! Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:24, 3 April 2018 (UTC)

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