Talk:Raya and the Last Dragon/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Wingwatchers in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:14, 6 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:14, 6 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

@Some Dude From North Carolina:, sure. Wingwatchers (talk) 00:12, 7 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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All   Done

  • The poster's non-free use rationale looks good.
  • The alt text for the poster feels generic. Expand it.
  •   Done
  • Why do some billing credits have refs. and others don't?
  • The same source is used for two credits in "story by". Why?
  • Remove the Indonesia release date per WP:FILMRELEASE.
  •   Done
  • Is the citation to The Numbers needed if it's wrong?
  • "impact towards" → "impact on"
  •   Done
  • "As of June 29, 2021" - why such a specific date?
  • Add a serial comma after "story" (American English).
  •   Done

Plot and cast

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  • At 587 words, the plot section passes WP:FILMPLOT.
  • Add a serial comma after Tong.
  •   Done
  • That's it here. #Cast also looks good.

Production

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  • Add wikilinks for writers, directors, and producers since this is their first mention apart from the lead.
  • #Development says Paul Briggs was a co-director but the lead says otherwise. Clarify.
  • "the film is untitled at the time" → "the film was untitled at the time"
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  • This source doesn't mention "August 24, 2019" or the "D23 Expo Walt Disney Animation Studios' presentation panel".
  • "Variety reported" - this is a lie. Their own source even says: "Entertainment Weekly first reported the news".
  • "Don Hall (director of Winnie the Pooh and Big Hero 6) and" → "Don Hall, director of Winnie the Pooh (2011) and Big Hero 6 (2014), and"
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  • "based off" - should this be written as "based on"?
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  • "quippiness" - not a word.
  • Actually, #Production doesn't feel right.
  • Is there a reason #Development and #Casting can't be merged?
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  • We go from "August 24, 2019" to "August 2, 2019" to "August 27, 2020" as a result of the current ordering. This source is about Cassie Steele being recast but it's first used in #Development to mention the directors as if that was the main topic being "reported". There is also a tendency to specify dates when "In [Month] [Year]" is already enough, and also publishers ("Deadline Hollywood said this, The Hollywood Reporter said that" becomes repetitive). This entire section should be rewritten for clarity.
  •   Fixed (hopefully)
  • "plot line" → "plotline"
  •   Done
  • "for why" - kinda wordy
  • Serial comma after "hair style".
  •   Done
  • "hair style" → "hairstyle"
  •   Done
  • "equipments" → "equipment"
  •   Done
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Release

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  • This source doesn't mention "November 25, 2020".
  • "and is [...] and as of" - repetitive.
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  • Home media should be expanded to list its special features.

Reception

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  • Several topics about the film's performance at the box office are unsourced; I marked them with the "citation needed" tag.
  • "thanks in-part", "closely behind", "huge jump" - doesn't sound encyclopedic.
  • Add a WP:DATECOMMA after June 4, 2021.
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  • The critical response section only includes 4 individual reviews in its second paragraph. Per WP:RECEPTION, try adding more reviews while also lowering the use of "A said B".
  • Put IndieWire in italics and wikilink SFGate.

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Future

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  • Should be expanded to more than one sentence.

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References

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  • ScreenRantScreen Rant
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  • I would suggest listing CBR by its full name, Comic Book Resources.
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  • Change quotation marks to apostrophes per WP:QWQ (#18, #41, and #76).
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  • Sort categories in alphabetical order.
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Progress

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GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):  
    b (citations to reliable sources):  
    c (OR):  
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):  
    b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  

Overall:
Pass/Fail:  

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@Wingwatchers: could you put {{done}} or such under the things you've done to make it more easy to navigate? Thanks. Pamzeis (talk) 01:53, 8 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

@Pamzeis:   Done Wingwatchers (talk) 02:23, 8 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

@Some Dude From North Carolina:, All done. Wingwatchers (talk) 18:16, 8 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Some references still need to be adjusted for WP:QWQ. Additionally, the production section is also still out of place, using specific dates that are later out of order and become confusing for readers. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 00:52, 9 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
@Some Dude From North Carolina:, thank you Pamzeis for fixing them. [1] Wingwatchers (talk) 02:54, 9 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
I have added three reviews in the "Critical response" section, hopefully, it will pass GA. Wingwatchers (talk) 04:32, 10 July 2021 (UTC)Reply