Talk:Ray Hall (basketball)

Post college

• User:Rikster2, I know this guy played in the CBA for several years. He was an all-star and may have been one of the leading scorers. You mentioned you know how to research CBA careers.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:13, 4 April 2023 (UTC)
• User:DaHuzyBru, I know this guy played at least briefly in Europe. That is your alley.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:13, 4 April 2023 (UTC)

There is no eurobasket profile for this guy, so I'm not much help sorry. DaHuzyBru (talk) 11:12, 4 April 2023 (UTC)

Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by Bruxton (talk) 00:44, 9 April 2023 (UTC)

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• ... that after Ray Hall threw an apple at Jo Jo White, White became Hall's sports agent? Source: https://infoweb-newsbank-com.chipublib.idm.oclc.org/apps/news/document-view?p=NewsBank&t=&sort=YMD_date%3AA&page=1&fld-base-0=alltext&maxresults=20&val-base-0=%22Ray%20Hall%22%20basketball&docref=news/0ED3CD9EDBA85BD3
  • Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Thomas Charles Sorby
  • Comment: 5th of 10 QPQs for this review.

Created by TonyTheTiger (talk). Self-nominated at 16:57, 6 April 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Ray Hall (basketball); consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: source is behind a paid wall, good faith assumed FuzzyMagma (talk) 13:58, 7 April 2023 (UTC)

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 05:47, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

I will (ideally) review this tomorrow (2 August UTC). ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 05:47, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Just a quick heads-up that I've been told offwiki Luna doesn't have internet access for the next few days, but will be able to resume the reviews after. Vaticidalprophet 16:02, 27 August 2023 (UTC)

Pass. This is the longest review I have ever done, and it is for an article that is just 1,000 words – oops. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 16:34, 5 September 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check

Earwig gives no concerns.

Prose

• In § High school, recommend opening with his full name.
  • OK--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:23, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "in the inner city" – do we know what city this refers to?
  • Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:26, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "At Canisius, Hall is the all-time Canisius" – rephrase to avoid using Canisius twice in close-succession. Also:
  • fixed-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:28, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• The following five few sentences all commence with He; they would look better alternating between he and Hall.
  • Thx-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:31, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "most recent Canisius NBA draftee" – wikilink NBA.
  • Linked NBA draft-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:33, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "4-year teammate Mike Smrek (2nd round, 1st pick) 1985 NBA draft" – I think this should be Mike Smrek's.
  • Different fix.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:35, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "scoring records, he formerly held" – recommend using Hall here.
  • Thx-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:37, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "(surpassed Al McClain, 1980–84 1861 and surpassed by Reggie Lewis, 1983–87 2709)" is a bit jargon-y; recommend rephrasing. I reckon this can be written and expanded upon a bit without the parentheses.
  • OK.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:40, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "Hall scored 13 points" – I would use he here.
  • OK-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:41, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "posted a 32%" – percent per MOS:%.
  • OK-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:42, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "back to October 1986 training camp" – pretty sure this needs a the.
  • Thx-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:44, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "and he signed with the team in October" – should this not be "that October"?
  • Thx-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:45, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "that would visit" – recommend rephrasing as "that would" was just used. And:
  • OK-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:47, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "Seoul, Korea" should be Seoul, South Korea.
  • OK-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:47, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• Wikilink MVP.
  • Done-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:49, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "Later in August 1988," – should probably be "Later that August".
  • OK-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:51, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• "abroad (in the 1988 PBA Reinforced Conference)" – the parentheses are not necessary.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:53, 26 August 2023 (UTC)

— Preceding unsigned comment added by LunaEatsTuna (talk • contribs) 22:42, August 20, 2023 (UTC)-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:15, 22 August 2023 (UTC)

Refs

Spotcheck good to go on refs 4, 11, 12 and 28.

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