Talk:Ratcliff Highway murders/Archive 1
Latest comment: 13 years ago by Derekbd in topic Work on the grammar
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Work on the grammar
Far too many commas in this. Use multiple sentences. I found myself reading every sentence about three times in an attempt to absorb the information therein. Even after doing that, I've already forgotten many of the facts presented. 68.90.109.146 (talk) 13:11, 26 April 2011 (UTC)
Why do folks complain and leave the work to someone else? Anyhow, I have been on a comma reduction mission and this article seems fine to me. Derekbd (talk) 19:24, 6 May 2011 (UTC)