We need more and better sources, more secondary sources, and a serious revision of the tone

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This article has a very unencyclopedic tone. That needs to be revised. It needs better sourcing, and we need to consult sources that are secondary more. This article also gives the impression of too closely following source material and possibly even advertisement for a publication wording and not showing enough of an attempt to use standard encyclopedia language.John Pack Lambert (talk) 18:29, 23 June 2022 (UTC)Reply