Talk:Punctelia rudecta/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by MeegsC in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: MeegsC (talk · contribs) 23:03, 28 February 2021 (UTC)
I'm happy to review this one. But I must say, I'm dismayed to learn that the lichen I've learned as Punctelia rudecta isn't! :P It may take me a few days to post my comments. MeegsC (talk) 23:03, 28 February 2021 (UTC)
Sorry it's taken me so long to get back to this. The article is already in very nice shape, but I do have a few questions/suggestions. I have this page on my watchlist, but feel free to ping me if you have any questions.
- Is this article written in Canadian English or American English? We have "color" and "gray" in the Description section, but "colour" in the Human Uses section, for example. One version should be used throughout.
- In the lede, in the sentence "The lichen is quite common and widespread in the southeastern United States, although it also occurs in Canada and northern Mexico as well." you don't need both "also" and "as well". One or the other will suffice.
- In the Systematics section, I'd suggest that you rework the first sentence to make it active rather than passive voice: i.e. "Swedish lichenologist Erik Acharius first described the lichen as a new species in 1814, naming it Parmelia rudecta."
- Did Hildur Krog create the genus Punctelia in 1982 specifically to include only those former Parmelia taxa with rounded pseudocyphellae? If so, it might be clearer to explain the circumscription in that way.
- Personally, I'd suggest you tweak the sentences in the Phylogeny section to include the study dates, rather than making them parenthetical; it would make the read less choppy.
- In the Description section, in the sentence starting "The thallus of Punctelia rudecta ranges in color from dark greenish gray to almost blue gray...", there should be dashes between "greenish gray" and "blue gray".
- Also in the Description section, in the sentence reading "The lobes comprising the thallus are mostly 3–8 mm (0.1–0.3 in) wide, and are more or less covered with cylindrical to branched isidia; they are typically more numerous towards the center of the thallus." it's unclear whether the bolded "they" (my bolding) refers to the lobes or the isidia.
- "The lichen, when it has a bluish-green coloration and dense isidia, is often readily spotted from a distance." I'd suggest "can be" in place of "is often".
- It would be good to provide some idea of where in the United States this lichen occurs. "East" is a big area! ;) Does "temperate" exclude Florida, for example? Or the desert southwest? Does it even occur out west, just less regularly?
- I'd suggest a slight change of wording in the bit about it occuring in "several" Canadian provinces. 7 of 10 is more than "several". Perhaps "most"? Or listing the ones it doesn't occur in (and mentioning that it doesn't occur in any of the territories)?
- "In nature, O. parmeliae can grow on P. rudecta only after another lichen inhabitant, a species of Fusarium, enzymatically degrades lecanoric acid, the primary lichen compound of P. rudecta." I'm not clear: are Fusarium species lichenicolous too?
- Have now mentioned that the Fusarium is an epiphytic fungus (not lichenicolous). Esculenta (talk) 14:07, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- Did they really say "...arguably the most weediest macrolichen..."? If so, you might want to put a [sic] after weediest to let readers know it's not a typo.
That's all I've got! Other than that, it looks good. Let me know when you've had the chance to address these. MeegsC (talk) 18:21, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- @MeegsC: Thanks for taking the time to read this and helping me improve the article. I hope these edits adequately address your helpful suggestions above. Esculenta (talk) 14:07, 12 March 2021 (UTC)