Talk:Pseudoxanthoma elasticum/GA1

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Jfdwolff in topic GA Review

GA Review

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  • Lead is a bit thin, doesn’t mention some of your major sections eg Epidemiology, History
  • Do you need so many short main sections?
  • Please check linking, many unfamiliar terms, like papular lesions and cutaneous laxity are not linked on first occurrence, although you’ve link skin, eyes and stomach, and the gene has three links
  • Other systems have become somewhat outdated by the discovery of the ABCC6 mutations. – vague, what other systems?
  • For excessive areas of skinaffected skin?

I'll read again tomorrow Jimfbleak - talk to me? 15:00, 31 March 2010 (UTC)Reply

Thanks Jim and Kilbad - I am currently returning from a Wikibreak and shall work on the above comments pretty soon. For ease of reference this is the diff for Kilbad's feedback. JFW | T@lk 14:04, 7 April 2010 (UTC)Reply

I am sorry. This has gone on long enough. This GA fails. TeacherA (talk) 03:35, 23 April 2010 (UTC)Reply

Fair enough. In the end, the new reviews offer some material that probably needed working into the article anyway. JFW | T@lk 21:51, 24 April 2010 (UTC)Reply