Talk:Priyamvada (magazine)

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Hi Gazal world, I hope that you are keeping well. I could do with your help on a couple of issues.

• "from the magazine's first issue in August 1885 to June 1895." Is this a typo, or was it really serialised for 11 years?[!]
• Manilal needs a proper introduction. I would suggest that you insert a brief sentence explaining who he was at the very start of "History".
• "Articles contributed by Manilal to Priyamvada were directly addressed to women readers in a homely and lively style. Priyamvada, ‘the one who speaks in pleasing and elegant manner’, addressed its readers in persuasive language" Could you confirm whether the homely and pleasing style applies just to Manilal's contributions, or to all articles. If the latter, what, if anything, was the difference in tone between Manilal's articles and those of other contributors?

Gog the Mild (talk) 13:19, 10 May 2019 (UTC)

Gog the Mild Hi Gog. Sorry for confusion. (1) Gulabsinh was serialiszd in Priyamvada, and after it closed down, it was continued in Sudarshan. (I have corrected the fact in article). (2) I am going to add proper description about Manilal. (3) That sentence about style of writing is only for Manilal's own writing in magazine. Priyamvada's most of the pages are covered by Manilal's own writing. (Except some articles and poems by others) As he started this magazine for woman education, he used to write all content in such manner like one woman talking with another woman. (And, like an elder woman advising younger woman). --Gazal world (talk) 15:05, 10 May 2019 (UTC)

No problem. You have written a fine article here. Obviously revert any of my changes you are not happy with, or flag them up here. Gog the Mild (talk) 15:26, 10 May 2019 (UTC)

Gog the Mild Thank you very much, Gog. One thing: Can we replace 'target audience' from the lead? --Gazal world (talk) 16:13, 10 May 2019 (UTC)

Leave it, Gog. I think, it is fine. --Gazal world (talk) 16:15, 10 May 2019 (UTC)

Feel free to change it. Perhaps "readership", or just "audience"? Gog the Mild (talk) 16:22, 10 May 2019 (UTC)