Talk:Princess Monster Wife/GA1
Latest comment: 7 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 20:43, 22 March 2017 (UTC)
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- In the phrase "all boy demographic groups", do you think you have to specify the age ranges as done in the cited source?
- I think you can combine the first and second paragraphs in the "Plot" section together as they are both rather short.
- I am not certain about the structure of the first sentence for the second paragraph of the "Production" section. I think it is primarily the ", according to Ward", which I feel is a little shoe-horned into the sentence. It has great content, but I think it could stated in a stronger way.
- In the following sentence, who is "he"? I am assuming you are referencing Ward, but I think it could be made clearer.
- Could you expand on how the song was inspired by "A Whole New World"? If there is not further information on it, then it is fine as it currently stands, but some expansion would be nice.
- Do you think that you should provide the date that he released the demo of the song on twitter? It could provide a better context for when it was released versus the episode's broadcast.