Talk:Previously On/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Adamstom.97 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 14:52, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:52, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
- "turning it into the black-and-white, 1950s style first seen in 'Filmed Before a Live Studio Audience'." – mentioning and linking an episode article directly into the plot section seems weird. Most Marvel articles would include a note with "As depicted in [media]" instead.
- Remove the comma after "disassembled remains".
- "to try balance the" → "to try to balance the"
- "who she is in present day" → "who she is in the present day"
- Is it "series' premiere" or "series premiere"?
- "large amount of particle effects" → "large number of particle effects"
- Avengers: Age of Ultron is linked twice.
- "heart-broken" → "heartbroken"
- Remove the comma after "a green screen for the sequence".
- Remove the comma after the quoted word "delicate".
- #Critical_response: The second paragraph has two reviews, the third paragraph has two, the fourth has one (?), and the fifth and final paragraph has two. There are currently twenty-two reviews on Rotten Tomatoes. Reduce the abundance of quotes and add some of them (WP:RECEPTION).
- Be consistent with The Art of VFX and Art of VFX.
- Wikilink Dave Itzkoff and mark references from The New York Times with "|url-access=limited".
- @Some Dude From North Carolina: I have addressed these points. For "series' premiere", that line is referring to the premiere (i.e. debut / first release) of the series rather than the first episode of the series, which would be the "series premiere". - adamstom97 (talk) 05:17, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
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