Talk:Pregnancy options counseling in the United States

Alexisdupuy

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Good Article! I had a few suggestions.

Prevalence: -How are the abortions performed legally? Give an example

Requirements and Arguments: -Lots of “you” language. Try to use “one” when you can, or rephrase your sentence. Like instead of saying “If you are under eighteen …” say “If one is under eighteen years of age, the state may require parental consent …”

-or “Most states allow an adult over eighteen to be excused from parental consent” instead of “In most states, you can go to a judge and request to be excused from this requirement.

-“When an abortion can be done depends on how far along you are in your pregnancy” is kind of awkward. Try instead “How far along a pregnancy is depends on when an abortion can be done.”

-“There are many questions that arise when the idea of getting an abortion comes up, including if public funds should be used, or if spouses should be notified.” Something like that. I feel like the questions put in quotation marks seems argumentative in a way.

-“There are many pro and con arguments that ‘come up’” Maybe “arise”?

-“Supporters of legal abortion argue the Supreme Court has declared abortion to be a fundamental right declared by the Constitution.” I know that you had quotes, but they look awkward with the sentence and you don’t really need them.

-“Supporters ‘of’ abortions believe that birth starts at conception” not “to”

-omit “One more of the many beliefs of supporters” sounds opinionated

-Need cites after facts

-Last sentence can be omitted

Types of Adoption:

-Instead of “Sometimes the birth mother and adoptive parents ..” say “In some cases, the birth mother and adoptive parents …”

Prenatal Care:

-First sentence is a little awkward. Try instead “Women are faced with a tough choice when an unplanned pregnancy occurs. These women are urged to …”

Overall, it’s good! Just make sure y’all add cites after facts and important information. And make sure you try and keep away from opinions and arguments.

Ehover2 (talk) 14:47, 27 October 2015 (UTC)

Alexisdupuy

Hi Alexis! Great article, I love the topic. You and your group did very well writing this.

I have a few suggestions:

1. Most importantly do not forget to cite your sources directly after the sentence, or the exact word for that matter.

2. I noticed some opinion-based material...try to steer away from that One example, when you said: First and foremost, they believe that abortion is murder. Instead of saying “they”, say the people against abortion think…

3. Another thing following that is this should be more neutral and fact based information rather than beliefs of a variety of people

4. “One more of the many beliefs of supporters of abortions is the idea that fetuses are incapable of feeling pain when abortions are performed “Abortion ProCon.org”.” I found this to be very intriguing; you should research and find out more of the scientific information on that belief

5. Avoid using terms that make you sound unsure of the material Ex.) Birthmother's might choose this option when she wants to be updated as the child grows up Do not use the word “might”

6. Avoid peacock terms (phrases such as: an important.., the best…, etc.)

All in all the article was enjoyable to read and only had some minor errors, change all those and the article can be perfect!!

Rwomac6 (talk) 00:53, 2 November 2015 (UTC)

Merge with Pregnancy options counseling?

Are these the same topics? The other article has a lead section and not much else. 03:11, 19 February 2016 (UTC)

Since this article's lead section references pregnancy counseling options in the United States, I suggest that the title of the article should reflect the options in the United States and not global options.

Edenma1 (talk) 16:58, 1 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the reply! It took me some time to come back to this, but I've moved the page to reflect this. If any of you have any objections, feel free to change it to another title. Me, Myself & I (☮) (talk) 06:11, 7 April 2016 (UTC)