Talk:Portia labiata/GA2
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Reviewer: Unionhawk (talk · contribs) 16:49, 17 October 2011 (UTC)
Criteria edit
A good article is—
- Well-written:
- (a) the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct; and
- (b) it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
- Verifiable with no original research:
- (a) it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline;
- (b) reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose); and
- (c) it contains no original research.
- Broad in its coverage:
- (a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic; and
- (b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
- Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
- Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
- Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
- (a) media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content; and
- (b) media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
Quick fail checks edit
- Stable
- No tags
- Images captioned and tagged
- No NPOV issues
Automated tools edit
Peer Reviewer edit
Suggestions generated by an automatic JavaScript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Consider adding more links to the article; per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (links) and Wikipedia:Build the web, create links to relevant articles.[?]
- If there is not a free use image in the top right corner of the article, please try to find and include one.[?]
- Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 30 cm, use 30 cm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 30 cm.[?] - Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.[?] Specifically, an example is 20 cm.
- Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.[?]
- This article may need to undergo summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is United States, then an appropriate subpage would be History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.[?]
Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article. Examples include: behavior (A) (British: behaviour), behaviour (B) (American: behavior), moustache (B) (American: mustache), meter (A) (British: metre), metre (B) (American: meter), defence (B) (American: defense), recognise (B) (American: recognize), isation (B) (American: ization), paralyse (B) (American: paralyze), moult (B) (American: molt).- Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
Allpigs are pink, so we thought ofa number ofways to turn them green.”
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.[?]
You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas.
Note that many of these suggestions have WP:WIAFA in mind, instead of WP:WIAGA.
Others edit
- No disambiguation links
- 1 dead link, but it says there's a WebCite archive available. I don't see it, but WebCite's server has been a little screwy lately.
Checks from reviewer edit
Clear and concise edit
As has been pointed out, the article uses inconsistent British/American spellings. This needs to be fixed to satisfy 1(a). Either one is correct, just be consistent.- The lead is a bit long, but it does meet the 4 paragraph guideline. I'll look over it a bit more when I look at 3(b)
- Layout is good
- Fiction is n/a
- Subject/verb agreement: Section 1 paragraph 3: "Behind the mouth is a pair of pedipalps ("palps" for short),[1] and those of male spiders are quite large and are used for displaying and mating.[3]"--Unionhawk Talk E-mail 15:08, 20 October 2011 (UTC)
- Same issue: Section 7: "These occasionally including grappling that sometimes breaks a leg, but more usually the final move is a lunge."--Unionhawk Talk E-mail 12:40, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
Verifiable edit
Broad edit
- Pass on 3(a).--Unionhawk Talk E-mail 13:05, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- Problems with 3(b):
- Section 1 seems to go into some unnecessary detail about spiders in general. While some of these details are excellent summaries that lead into details specific to Portia labiata, others (e.g. "Spiders maintain balance when walking, so that legs 1 and 3 on one side and 2 and 4 on the other side are moving, while the other four legs are on the surface. To run faster, spiders increase their stride frequency.[14]:328") are only relevant because they are related to spiders.--Unionhawk Talk E-mail 13:05, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
Neutral/Stable/Images edit
All good (see #Quick fail checks)
Final checklist edit
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall: