Talk:Pokémon Sword and Shield/GA3

GA Review

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Nominator: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 04:05, 9 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: NegativeMP1 (talk · contribs) 22:08, 13 September 2024 (UTC)

My story with this game is one of sorrow, regret, sin, agony, and eternal damnation.

I mean, uh, hi. I'll take a look at this some time in the next week (hopefully). λ NegativeMP1 22:08, 13 September 2024 (UTC)

None of the quickfail criteria alone is met, and I don't know how relevant the past review is when it's mostly been rewritten since the last attempts by a completely new nominator. So I'll be treating this as a clean review for the most part. Actual prose comments to follow soon. λ NegativeMP1 18:12, 22 September 2024 (UTC)

Prose review

• "Game Freak approached the games based on the theme of strength and striving to be the "greatest or the strongest," which was expressed through the Switch's status as the most powerful console to run a Pokémon game, the gigantic-size Pokémon Dynamax mechanic, and in-game references to various elements British folklore featuring giants and other mythical creatures." This is a very long sentence, could it be possible to break it up / reword it to be more digestable?
• The whole release section is really long, maybe it could be condensed into a few paragraphs? I'd also recommend renaming it to "Marketing and release", but that's personal preference.
• "Sword and Shield's lack of depth and innovation were criticized" → "Some critics felt that Sword and Shield lacked in depth and innovation."
• As a side note, I made some minor adjustments in areas that I felt were necessary but were too little to warrant bringing up in review. Feel free to change anything you don't like.

Image review

• I suggest adding alt text to the gameplay screenshot and the photo of Ohmori, though this is optional.

Source review

• Spotchecked some uses of 1, 6, 14, 21, 29, 35, 43, 59/60, 69, 83, and 87, all of which verify the text they are associated with.
• As a side note, the reference formatting is fairly inconsistent. Sometimes the website is wikilinked, sometimes it isn't.

Final comments

Overall, this article is pretty well written and it's a very major improvement from the previous version that was failed months ago. I'll put this on hold for now to give you time to address any comments. On a related note, I'm sorry this took so long, I forget that I write myself down to review articles sometimes. λ NegativeMP1 06:38, 24 September 2024 (UTC)

@NegativeMP1 I believe I've addressed all of your concerns. I admittedly wasn't sure on how to trim release, but I've tried to make it a bit more easily digestible there for readers. Let me know if anything else needs to be done. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 13:14, 24 September 2024 (UTC)

Alright, the article looks good. I'll be passing this, good job. λ NegativeMP1 17:19, 24 September 2024 (UTC)

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