Talk:Plymouth shooting

Latest comment: 3 months ago by Ianmacm in topic Lead section

Unclear phrasing

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The article says:

At 18:05 BST (UTC+1) on 12 August 2021, during a physical altercation, victim Maxine Davison, perpetrator Jake Davison's 51-year-old mother, contacted her sister regarding the argument.

What argument? There's no mention of any arguments before that sentence. Should it say "an argument"? Or is there text missing before that sentence? Nakonana (talk) 02:25, 5 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

Same issue with the following sentence:

At 18:23, as further police arrived, Davison shot himself on Henderson Place.

There's no previous mention of police arriving, so the word "further" doesn't make sense here. Nakonana (talk) 02:39, 5 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

BBC television documentary

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There is a documentary about the shooting on BBC3 this evening, and it can also be watched on iPlayer.[1] ♦IanMacM♦ (talk to me) 07:38, 27 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

Lead section

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My edit has been reverted.

Revisions to guidelines are a separate issue from the inquest verdict, and should be in a separate paragraph. S C Cheese (talk) 11:18, 4 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

I've reverted my edit, but there is a broader problem which is that the WP:LEAD section is currently too short.--♦IanMacM♦ (talk to me) 15:51, 4 July 2024 (UTC)Reply