Talk:Pichu Pichu/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ealdgyth (talk · contribs) 15:38, 24 February 2024 (UTC)

I'll get to this in the next few days. Ealdgyth (talk) 15:38, 24 February 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• I randomly googled three phrases and only turned up Wikipedia mirrors. Earwig's tool shows no sign of copyright violation.
• Spotchecks:
  • "Off the western coast of South America, the Nazca Plate subducts beneath the South American Plate; this subduction is responsible for volcanism in southern Peru" is sourced to this source p. 252 which supports the information
  • "The Andamayo and Mollebaya eventually join to form the Vitor and Siguas river and flow to the Pacific Ocean" is sourced to the above source p. 254 which supports the information
  • "The landslide is responsible for the arcuate shape of Pichu Pichu mountain" is sourced to this source p. 2 which supports the information
• Lead:
  • Suggest "left a large north-south trending scar" be reworded ... perhaps "left a large scar that runs north to south"

    Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:28, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

  • "Pichu Pichu bore glaciers during the last glacial maximum, which left moraines and other glacial landforms." I'm assuming the glaciers are gone now? If so, suggest "Pichu Pichu bore glaciers during the last glacial maximum, which left moraines and other glacial landforms after they melted." or "Pichu Pichu bore glaciers during the last glacial maximum, which left moraines and other glacial landforms after their disappearance <date of disappearance>"

    Aye, but no source specifically attaches a given age to the Pichu Pichu retreat; I've added "retreated". Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:28, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

  • Link for "Inka" - and our articles use "Inca"....

    Changed. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:28, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

  • "offerings are made to it even today" suggest "offerings continue to be made to he/her."

    Went with "it" as I don't recall which gender this apu is. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:28, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

• Name:
  • "Ascents" non-climbers will be a bit confused here - suggest link and short explanation

    Went with a more generic term. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:28, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

  • "Part of the mountain is in the nature reserve" - "the" here suggests a named reserve - we should name it or it should be "Part of the mountain is in nature reserve."

    It is named in the preceding sentence? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:28, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

• Geography:
  • Link for "scarp"?
  • Link for "arcuate shape"?

    Done and done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:28, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

  • "and covered by material from the other volcanoes in the area" do you mean "and was covered by material from the other volcanoes in the area"?

    Yes, added. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:28, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

• Archeology:
  • "The Inkas built a zig-zagging trail on to the mountain" do you mean "The Inkas built a zig-zagging trail on the mountain" or "The Inkas built a zig-zagging trail to the mountain"?

    Up the flanks of the mountain. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:28, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

  • "The existence of petroglyphs with Inka geometric motifs is controversial" how exactly is it controversial?

    According to the German source, climbers state that they don't exist. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:28, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

  • "During village ceremonies, people head up the mountain to collect resinous material." ... this feels very "tacked on" and devoid of context - is it really needed to be mentioned?

    Removed it. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:28, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth (talk) 16:54, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

Looks good, passing this now. Ealdgyth (talk) 14:41, 26 February 2024 (UTC)