Talk:Philip Primrose/GA1

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Connormah in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nikkimaria (talk) 03:34, 1 June 2011 (UTC)Reply

On hold pending copy-editing. Nikkimaria (talk) 04:21, 1 June 2011 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review. Will get to this later today sometime. Connormah (talk) 22:22, 1 June 2011 (UTC)Reply

Writing and formatting

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  • Some unneeded repetition - in the lead we see "Upon his" x 2, repeat of retirement in 1915, "took up" x 2, etc
  • Some copy-editing is needed here - for example, what is the "United Kingsdon"?
  • The first para of Early life uses "He" repeatedly, and it's not entirely clear where his father stops and Philip begins
  • Macleod or Macloed?
  • Ellipses should not be set with square brackets
  • Need more hyphens - for example, "three-round salute"

Accuracy and verifiability

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  • Order Bibliography alphabetically?
  • Ref 8: legislative assembly is the publisher, not the author
  • Ref 12: Alberta Online Encyclopedia could be considered either a work or a publisher, but is definitely not an author
  • Why include publisher location for one bibliography entry and not the other two

Broad

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Some minor repetition of information

Neutrality

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No issues noted

Stability

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No issues noted

Images

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  • Source link for 1914 NWMP image is dead