Talk:Philip Primrose/GA1
Latest comment: 12 years ago by Connormah in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Nikkimaria (talk) 03:34, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
On hold pending copy-editing. Nikkimaria (talk) 04:21, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. Will get to this later today sometime. Connormah (talk) 22:22, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
Writing and formatting edit
- Some unneeded repetition - in the lead we see "Upon his" x 2, repeat of retirement in 1915, "took up" x 2, etc
- Some copy-editing is needed here - for example, what is the "United Kingsdon"?
- The first para of Early life uses "He" repeatedly, and it's not entirely clear where his father stops and Philip begins
- Macleod or Macloed?
- Ellipses should not be set with square brackets
- Need more hyphens - for example, "three-round salute"
Accuracy and verifiability edit
- Order Bibliography alphabetically?
- Ref 8: legislative assembly is the publisher, not the author
- Ref 12: Alberta Online Encyclopedia could be considered either a work or a publisher, but is definitely not an author
- Why include publisher location for one bibliography entry and not the other two
Broad edit
Some minor repetition of information
Neutrality edit
No issues noted
Stability edit
No issues noted
Images edit
- Source link for 1914 NWMP image is dead