Talk:Peter Winn (footballer)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 10:12, 12 September 2019 (UTC)

I'll pick this one up, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 10:12, 12 September 2019 (UTC)

Initial review

Infobox

• Source for his full name?

Lead

• Very short paragraphs are usually frowned upon. The opening is only a single sentence on its own. Could do with merging this with the paragraph below.
• If you merge, drop Winn for He at the start of the following sentence.
• Perhaps link loaned out to Loan (sports) for the uninitiated.

Stevenage

• FA Cup is linked in the first paragraph but also in the previous paragraph. No need for the repeat link in such close proximity.
• "Winn scored Stevenage's third goal of the game in injury-time to seal the victory. Winn described the goal as the "biggest moment of his career", these two sentences could potentially merged. "Seal the victory, describing the goal as..." perhaps?
• "after his foot had caught Southend defender Sean Clohessy in the face", the source for this only states it was for a challenge?

Macclesfield Town

• "He kept a clean sheet during the match" > remainder of the match? As he only played just over 20 minutes in goal it's probably worth distinguishing that.

Chester

• "Having played twelve times for Chester during the first half of the season due to injury", only twelve times perhaps? Right now there's nothing to indicate that this is considered lower than the norm.
• "twelve appearances at King's Lynn's" > King's Lynn?
• "ultimately secured King's Lynn survival", vice versa here.

References

• There are a couple of error messages being returned in refs 59 and 60. Seemingly because you're adding your own italic markup rather than using the newspaper= parameter.

Good quality article as usual, a few minor points to be addressed above. Placed on hold for now. Kosack (talk) 12:07, 12 September 2019 (UTC)

@Kosack: Thanks for reviewing the article, Kosack. All valid points again. I have gone through and made all of the above changes. Let me know if there is anything else. Cheers. SBFCEdit (talk) 02:25, 15 September 2019 (UTC)

We still have the issue of a single sentence opening paragraph? Kosack (talk) 09:06, 16 September 2019 (UTC)

Just changed it now. Thought you were referring to the paragraph below that. SBFCEdit (talk) 18:39, 16 September 2019 (UTC)

Ah I see, no worries. I'm happy that this meets the GA criteria and the minor issues above have been resolved. Promoting. Kosack (talk) 20:43, 16 September 2019 (UTC)