Talk:Peter Bynoe/GA1

GA Review

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

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This article is in decent shape, but it needs more work before it becomes a Good Article.

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   In the Personal Background section, it would be best to mention "Peter Bynoe" first and then mention "Bynoe" instead of having it the other way around.

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

   Dates need to be un-liked, per here. In the lead, it would be best to add (NBA) after "National Basketball Association". In the Personal Background section, it would be best to link "Boston Celtics" once, per here. In the Business Career section, it would be best to add (COMSAT) after "Communications Satellite Corporation", I mean I know what it is, but how 'bout the person that reads this article. In the Other Achievements section, why is there a mention of "Mr. Bynoe"?

   Check. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 16:03, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

2. Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

   C. It contains no original research:

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

   It would help if an image can be inserted to the article, so it can illustrate the significance of it. But, if an image can't be found, I won't fail the article because of that.

   Check. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 16:03, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   If the statements above can be answered, I will pass the article. Good luck with improving this article!

--  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 20:12, 11 September 2008 (UTC)

The Personal Background setion begins "Born in Boston, Massachusetts,[5] Peter Bynoe came from a well-respected family." So I don't know what you want me to do as far as beginning with Bynoe.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 04:03, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

See, the article mentions "Peter Bynoe" in the second paragraph of the section when instead it should mention "Bynoe", since the first paragraph covers his full name. Hope that made sense. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 16:03, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

I think I got it now.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 05:05, 13 September 2008 (UTC)

Check. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 19:29, 13 September 2008 (UTC)

Celtics is linked.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 04:03, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

Fixed Mr. Bynoe, COMSAT and NBA.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 04:03, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

Thank you to TonyTheTiger for getting the stuff I left at the talk page, because I have gone off and placed the article as GA. Congrats. ;) --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 19:29, 13 September 2008 (UTC)