Talk:Perth Underground railway station/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 19:55, 1 March 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Clean as always with just a few things to tidy up in the copy, especially when talking about the activities of the TBM. Ping me when fixed/improved. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 23:28, 1 March 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for the review Sammi Brie. I've address all your comments :) Steelkamp (talk) 05:11, 2 March 2024 (UTC)

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

Copy changes

Lead

• It was built as part of the construction for the Mandurah line, and was known as William Street station during construction due to its location on William Street. WP:CINS remove the comma
  • Done.
• By the end of 2005, the station box had been excavated to its lowest level, and in February 2006, the tunnel boring machine (TBM) first reached the station, having tunnelled from Esplanade station. The TBM tunnelled north from Perth Underground after that. The TBM reached the station for the second time in August 2006 after digging the second tunnel from Esplanade station. It again tunnelled north from Perth Underground, surfacing west of Perth station. Reword to be a bit less verbose if possible.
  • I've reduced the length of this section a bit. Any more and I will have to leave out some of this information.
• five minute frequency during peak hour and a fifteen minute frequency Hyphenate five-minute and fifteen-minute as adjectives. (Also in Services section)
  • Done.

History

• Acquisition of land for the construction of Perth Underground station was managed by LandCorp. Acquisitions occurred between May 2003 and March 2004. Consider combining: Acquisition of land for the construction of Perth Underground station was managed by LandCorp and occurred between May 2003 and March 2004.
  • Done.
• Expressions of interest for the Package F contract were called for in March 2003. Five consortia submitted expressions of interest by May 2003. Consider combining: Expressions of interest for the Package F contract were called for in March 2003, and five consortia submitted expressions of interest by May.
  • Done.
• Diaphragm walls were chosen to form the station box's walls rather than sheet piles like at Esplanade station as there were restrictions on noise and vibrations and that less land was required to construct diaphragm walls. Add a comma after vibrations and remove the "that".
  • Done.
• Three consecutive sentences start with "The TBM..." Reword for variety.
  • I've reworded the second of these sentences.
• By the end of 2006, most structural work had been completed and architectural finishes and electrical and mechanical fit-out had commenced. Add a comma after "completed", which will help with all the "and"s and fix the CINS issue.
  • Done.
• open in late-2013 "late 2013", no hyphen
  • Done.

Services

• North of Perth Underground station are Joondalup line services and south of Elizabeth Quay station are Mandurah line services Add comma after "Joondalup line services"
  • Done.

Sourcing and spot checks

• 2: Announcement of 2016 renaming of Esplanade to Elizabeth Quay. Y
• 9: PTA art page on the linkway, containing the "The changes are synchronised to create a pulse or heart beat." quote. Y
• 10: Figure 1 in the attached file (a set of PDFs) shows the line starting at Kenwick, avoiding the CBD. Y
• 31, 46: AGF on offline source.
• 54: Ms MacTiernan has warned that may continue with fewer trains than normal on the Joondalup this morning as it becomes the first to take passengers through the tunnels under the CBD to the William Street and Esplanade stations instead of the existing City station. Y
• 65: WA state government statement that 140 William development had commenced. Y
• 80: Perth station with 5 614 273 boardings on the Mandurah. It's too bad that, as we've talked about before, newer figures do not seem to be available.

No CLOP issues; there's one passage (by Wellington Street to the north, William Street to the west and Murray Street) but that's not novel phrasing at all.

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