Talk:Persis Foster Eames Albee/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:02, 4 October 2020 (UTC)

Reviewing this for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 09:02, 4 October 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• References in the lead are not necessary

 Done

Early life and marriage

• "born May 30, 1836" - born on

 Done

• "was born May 30, 1836 in Newry, Maine, " - a comma is needed between "1836" and "in"

 Done

• "and from 1869 to 1871 a" - was a

 Done

• "Soon after the marriage, the couple moved to Winchester. They lived in a white two-story colonial house on the riverbank near a railroad station in the center of town." - these two sentences might be better merged with each other

 Done

• "The house included a store outlet. Their store having the city's only public telephone made it a natural congregation point." - same query as above

 Done

Career

• "and the company expanded and took over all the floors" - to take

 Done

• "Fifty years old in 1886," - try to avoid starting a sentence with a numerical figure

 Done

• "She was a California Perfume Company businesswoman and had pioneered the company's" - repetition of "company"

 Done

• "in a box kit.[15][11][16][17]" - refs in numerical order please

 Done

• "Albee later offered to her customers a variety of California Perfume Company cosmetics." - Albee later offered a variety of California Perfume Company cosmetics to her customers.

 Done

• "Albee is considered Avon's" - considered by whom?

 Done

Later life and death

• "Albee died December 7, 1914" - {[xt|died on December 7}}

 Done

• "at Templeton, Massachusetts. She was 78 years old." - consider merging this portion of text together

 Done

Citations

• Reference 2's publisher and publication date is missing

 Done

• Also, the same reference's access date should be in the month, day and year date format

 Done

• References 5 and 21 are duplicates; only one is needed

 Done

• THe formatting of the page number for Reference 33 is incorrect

 Done

• The formatting of Reference 38 is incomplete

 Done

• newspapers.com should begin with a capital letter each time

 Done

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 13:26, 4 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Working --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:12, 5 October 2020 (UTC)
• @MWright96: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:29, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

• @Doug Coldwell: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 11:44, 10 October 2020 (UTC)