Talk:Perfect Illusion/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:23, 23 December 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• and ultimately is a commentary → and is ultimately a commentary
• Underwood typewriter and after numerous → a semicolon would help this flow better → Underwood typewriter; after numerous
• permutations the composers → comma before "the composers"
• boyfriend Taylor Kinney, was refuted by the singer → overfluous comma here
• The song's release was preceded → state "the recording's" here for alternation
• reviews for "Perfect Illusion" with many of them → comma before "with many"
• stating "Gaga fuses her neo-folkie Lilith-hippie mode with her disco roots in this Mark Ronson-produced dance-floor confession". → this is overly detailed for the lead and can be thus removed
• reached number 15 on the US Billboard Hot 100 as well as entered → comma before "as well"
• subordinate charts also → remove "also" here
• top-ten → top 10
• Slovak Republic → state simply Slovakia here
• as well as a number of television → as well as made a number of television

Infobox

• flawless ;)

Background and development

• and recording processes → and recording process
• Buro247.com → omit the ".com" part

Writing and recording

• The song began as a demo called → The song fruited from a demo called
• the US → write out please
• The song's arrangement → State "The track's" here to alternate
• was done by Ronson who played → was handled by Ronson, who played
• and Parker added drums → alongside Parker adding drums
• "She loves just sitting at a piano and barking orders at a drummer and she has an incredible voice," he confessed, and then went on to clarify → Concerning this, he confessed that "she...", further clarifiying
• and then go → and then go on
• recalled: "She's never → : to ,
• Lyrics were developed → They were developed
• adding: "We stripped everything away → : to ,
• Shangri-La Studios which BloodPop → comma before "which"

Music and lyrical interpretation

• building chord sequence, which he felt leads → building chord sequence that he felt leads (due to word repetition)
• autotune → Auto-Tune
• Lewis Corner from Digital Spy gave a breakdown of the song → what is this supposed to mean?
• Add release year in brackets to "Just Dance" and "Poker Face"
• Same for Born This Way
• with the verse and the refrain being connected → due to the verse and the refrain being connected
• and Gaga's vocals span → with Gaga's vocals spanning
• Lyrically, "Perfect Illusion" is about the → Lyrically, "Perfect Illusion" delves on the (for better reading)
• hence the song name → hence the song's name
• an interview to iHeartMedia → an interview with iHeartMedia
• as "about modern ecstasy... → as being "about modern ecstasy [...]
• that the lyrics ultimately was a → that the lyrics ultimately were a
• was about their relationship. She felt that the lyrics spoke → was about their relationship, further believing that they spoke
• The singer added: "I love Taylor → : to ,
• against [him]... [I]t's a → ... to [...]

Release and artwork

• Gaga confirmed the release date → Following this, the singer confirmed the release date
• Another photo was revealed → use "unveiled" here for alternation
• still picture → shot
• called the artwork as "iconic" → called the cover "iconic"
• comparing Gaga to that of Canadian singer-songwriter Alice Glass → remove "that of"
• for the Bustle quote, please fix ... to [...]
• 16 second → 16-second
• and the same chord beats → with the same chord beats
• along side host → alongside host
• in the world... It feels like → ... to [...]

Critical reception

• four out of five stars, saying that the song "delights me → use "track" here for alternation
• compared the verses to those by singer → compared the verses to work by singer
• Unlink "Artpop" here
• called the song "stomping" and said that Gaga was "blubbering → alternate here with "the singer"
• In ranking Lady Gaga's lead singles → use "the singer's" here for alternation
• Release year of "Applause" in brackets
• ranked it number twenty-eight → ranked it number 28
• stating "Gaga fuses → comma after "stating"

Chart performance

• million first-week US streams → million first-week streams in the United States
• iHeartMedia owned → iHeartMedia-owned
• released dated September 24, 2016 → released for the week ending September 24, 2016
• becoming her second lowest peaking → becoming her second-lowest peaking
• Other debuts atop the charts happened in Finland → change "happened" to "occurred"
• attained top-ten → attained top 10
• top-five → top five
• Link "Italian Singles Chart"

Music video

• According to Page Six, the music video was filmed → Use "the visual" here for alternation
• recording studio with Gaga and Ronson, during conception of many → no comma + state "the singer" here for alternation
• is an "energetic" track they → comma before "they"
• That also gave them the idea to use Ronson, Parker → It also inspired them to use Ronson, Parker (alternation)
• all playing cameos in the clip → for cameo appearances in the clip
• It starts with Gaga singing → It starts with her singing (alternation)
• which made up majority → add "the" before "majority"

Reception and analysis

• dance nature of the clip and noted that Gaga had posted → alternate with "the singer" here
• Carey O'Donnell from Papermag felt that the video → alternate with "the visual" here please
• She added that its a "different direction → "its" to "it's"
• one a clear idea regarding what to expect from the video → alternate with "clip" here
• realness to it... The → ... to [...]
• like her previous albums, however he → , to ;
• I've edited the image's description here by myself

Live performances and media usages

• and silver shorts and only with a microphone, → and sliver shorts, alongside a microphone

Charts

• flawless ;)
• Are there any year-end charts?

Certifications

• flawless ;)

Release history

• Unlink formats and labels

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 59.9% is WAY too much! Please look for the first 5 sources at the top of the list and reduce the content from them in the article's body

Images and others

• Images perfectly illustrate the article
• By the way, cool idea with the eye-rolling clip

Links

• No problem here!

References

• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article.
• 1 dead link from iTunes! Please fix!

Outcome

•  On hold for 7 days! You've done a brilliant job with this , Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:45, 25 December 2016 (UTC)
  • @Cartoon network freak: thanks for the detailed review. I have pruned down quite a bit of the prose and removed the COPYVIO a lot. Except for the V magazine quote which as I explained will pass COPYVIO for its attestation. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 11:12, 26 December 2016 (UTC)
    • Gladly passing! It's okay with the COPYVIO thing now ;) Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:43, 26 December 2016 (UTC)

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