Talk:Pep Guardiola/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Dr Salvus in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dr Salvus (talk · contribs) 20:21, 2 April 2022 (UTC)Reply


Hello. I'll be the one who'll review this. Not being a native English speaker, it could take a few days to review the grammar (I'm going to do this with a friend). Dr Salvus 20:21, 2 April 2022 (UTC)Reply

Review

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  1. Well-written:
  2. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (prose) The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass
    (b) (MoS) The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass
  3. Verifiable with no original research:
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    (a) (references) The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass
    (b) (citations to reliable sources) The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass
    (c) (original research) The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass
    (d) (copyvio and plagiarism) The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass
  5. Broad in its coverage:
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    (a) (major aspects) The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass
    (b) (focused) The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass
  7. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
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    The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass
  9. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
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    The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass
  11. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
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    (a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales) The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass
    (b) (appropriate use with suitable captions) The reviewer has left no comments here   Pass

Result

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Result Notes
  Pass The reviewer has left no comments here

Discussion

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Tomorrow, I'll see the rest. Dr Salvus 21:07, 2 April 2022 (UTC)Reply

Let's see the grammatical mistakes (corrected by my friend)

  • He is often considered to be one of the greatest managers of all time -> He is considered one of the greatest managers of all time [...]
  • he guided Barcelona to the treble of La Liga, Copa del Rey and UEFA Champions League. -> he led Barcelona to the treble of La Liga, Copa del Rey and UEFA Champions League.
  • in 2003, Guardiola chose to play in Qatar with Al-Ahli from Doha in the Qatar Stars League, -> in 2003, Guardiola decided to play in Qatar with Al-Ahli from Doha in the Qatar Stars League,
  • a home draw to Southampton on 23 October 2016 meant Guardiola had equalled -> a home draw to Southampton on 23 October 2016 meant Guardiola had equaled

Dr Salvus 22:39, 4 April 2022 (UTC)Reply

Infobox looks to meet all manuals of style except, MOS:DATETOPRES. Walter Görlitz (talk) 17:34, 7 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
@Dr Salvus Is there anything else you or Walter think there is to fix? ArsenalGhanaPartey (talk) 14:54, 13 April 2022 (UTC)Reply

Further comments

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  • The prestigious Italian magazine Guerin Sportivo heralded: remove prestigious, it's not at all.
  • Merge the last three sections of his playing career in a section called "Late career".

I've read the first half of the text. Will do the rest later. Dr Salvus 18:02, 29 April 2022 (UTC)Reply

@Dr Salvus Done. ArsenalGhanaPartey (talk) 16:19, 3 May 2022 (UTC)Reply
@ArsenalGhanaPartey I've finished everything.
  • which has influenced approaches of managers such as Mauricio Pochettino,[citation needed] add the source or leave it out
  • On 6 January 2022, Guardiola tested positive for COVID-19. By 14 January 2022, Guardiola had recovered from COVID-19. -> On 6 January 2022, Guardiola tested positive for COVID-19 amid its pandemic in the United Kingdom; he fully recovered on 14 January.
  • I'm not very competent on this matter but there's 10% of possible of text violating copyright
That's all. Sorry for my not being active on it but it did think you were no more interested on it as you were less active. Dr Salvus 20:21, 5 May 2022 (UTC)Reply
@Dr Salvus Done. ArsenalGhanaPartey (talk) 15:03, 9 May 2022 (UTC)Reply

@ArsenalGhanaPartey: Omg, you've made a copyvio here and here. Dr Salvus 19:31, 9 May 2022 (UTC)Reply

The first edit is a quote, so it is not copyvio. The second is copyvio. However, neither edits were made by me. I'll resolve them. ArsenalGhanaPartey (talk) 20:08, 9 May 2022 (UTC)Reply
Correction, both are quotes. ArsenalGhanaPartey (talk) 13:44, 23 May 2022 (UTC)Reply

Status query

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Dr Salvus, ArsenalGhanaPartey, where does this review stand? Have the issues been addressed? Are there any issues with recent edits to the article? It would be nice to get this review moving again. Many thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:45, 9 June 2022 (UTC)Reply

@BlueMoonset, sorry I had completely forgot this. I'll immediately promote this. Dr Salvus 16:04, 9 June 2022 (UTC)Reply