Talk:Paul Rapsey Hodge/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Doug Coldwell in topic GA Review
GA Review edit
| GA toolbox |
|---|
| Reviewing |
Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch
Reviewer: JPxG (talk · contribs) 23:10, 30 March 2021 (UTC)
I'll do my best! jp×g 23:10, 30 March 2021 (UTC)
For this one I will use the same scale as I do for all my reviews.
Checked and verified to be good, no issue.
Not an applicable concern.
This thing needs to be fixed or clarified.
This thing has been fixed or clarified.
This thing should be fixed, but I won't hold up a "pass" for it.
Huh?
Preliminary notes edit
Copyvio edit
- Earwig's detector finds nothing.
Stability / POV edit
- Article has been around for a few years, and nothing seems to have happened on it besides harmonious collaboration. No real POV stance is taken, let alone an undue one.
Media edit
- All media is public-domain and clearly illustrates topics related to the article subject.
Focus / scope / coverage / completeness edit
- Born, lived, designed, built, died. Not much more to talk about, is there?
- It feels like the membership of secret societies and death could be expanded on a bit more.
Prose / MoS edit
- Lead is pretty short, I think it ought to mention what some of his inventions were and who used them.
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:59, 1 April 2021 (UTC)
- Well-written and comprehensible.
- §Societies and §Death are both single-sentence sections. They should either be combined into a §Personal life or expanded.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:54, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
- "
devices for grinding wheat, regulating springs in railway cars,[8] machinery for processing felted cloth, machinery for brewing liquors, papermaking machinery, machinery that produced dinnerware, and improvements in machinery technology for the smelting of glass, metal, and porcelain. He also made improvements to machinery that made pigments for ink, gas lighting, and waterproofing fabrics
": this could really stand to be broken out into individual sentences for each, if sources exist that can do so.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:51, 1 April 2021 (UTC)
Ref check edit
- Ref 1 (Grace's Guide): Credible source, says everything that's cited to it. An interesting thing from this source that would be nice to have in the article:
At one of the meetings of the IMechE in 1850, in discussions about the enormous problem of railway axle failures, Hodge made the very interesting suggestion that "To arrive at any true results as to the structure of iron it would be necessary to call in the aid of the microscope, to examine the fibrous and crystalline structure."
Microscope analysis of the crystal structure of metals is a big-ass deal (and continues to be so today)! - Ref 2 (Popular Science Monthly): Reliable source, checks out; it seems to me like the relevant passage is on page 490 though.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:58, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 3 (Deseret Evening News): Reliable source, supports what's cited to it.
- Ref 4 (Lyons 1976, 71): Reliable source; could not verify this source using the Internet, but it isn't load-bearing (its only use is to support a statement referenced to other citations as well).
- Ref 5 (Kane 1997, 272): Reliable source, and supports the claim cited to it. It's on page 273, not 272, so editing to be correct.
- Ref 6 (King 2001, 4-5): Reliable source, and supports the claims cited to it.
- Ref 7 (Santa Cruz Sentinel): Reliable source, and supports the claims cited to it.
- Ref 8 (Proceedings): Two inventions had been blended into one, but I fixed this. Reliable source which now supports the claims being cited to it.
- Ref 9 (Hodge 1840): Checks out.
- Ref 10 (White 1979, 280): Could not get this page from Google Books, but it's a reliable source and I will AGF.
- Ref 11 (White 1979, 491): Could not get this page from Google Books, but it's a reliable source and I will AGF.
- Ref 12 (White 1979, 281): Could not get this page from Google Books, but it's a reliable source and I will AGF.
- Ref 13 (Hodge 1849): Checks out.
Conclusion edit
@Doug Coldwell: A good article, a pleasure to read, and informative about a subject few would be capable of writing in this much detail about. Would be thrilled to pass after the repair of the two sections mentioned above. jp×g 20:41, 31 March 2021 (UTC)