Talk:Pattycake (gorilla)/GA1

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Reviewer: Zanimum (talk · contribs) 23:35, 8 May 2014 (UTC)Reply

Birth

  • It took me a second to identify who the "her" in the quote was... the gorilla, the wife, or the unconceived child. Does the quote call for a square bracketed addition?
    • Hmm. The first sentence introduces Pattycake's birth. The second sentence introduces her mother. However, I think I see the problem. I felt that some editors might not realize that Lulu was female and Kongo was male, so I introduced her parents in the second sentence. There's any number of ways to fix this. I'll come up with one shortly. Thanks for pointing this out. Viriditas (talk) 00:59, 9 May 2014 (UTC)Reply

Custody dispute

  • Gentle Gorilla was by an artist. Immediately, I think of an illustrator, a "picture book". Was that what the book was, or was it a non-fiction tome? Was she an activist involved some how, or just reading about things in the newspaper?
    • The author's observations of gorilla behavior form the foundation of the book and were instrumental to the custody case. She was an illustrator, but according to the Associated Press, she spent so much time drawing gorillas at the zoo that she was considered an unofficial employee.[1] Keep in mind, back in the day, hobbyists and amateurs could often get directly involved in activities that are generally now considered off-limits without the right qualifications. I'm thinking of all of those uncredentialed amateur hobbyists who used to run university space telescopes and computer labs, and amateur scientists who could actually participate in science itself. The Book Industry Study Group classified it as SCIENCE / Life Sciences / Zoology / Primatology. It is not a picture book, but it does contain her illustrations. It was reviewed favorably by Library Journal in 1978. More information available in this review by Nancy Grape.[2] Viriditas (talk) 03:14, 9 May 2014 (UTC)Reply

Congo Gorilla Forest

Passing "Breeding and offspring", "Later life".

References

  • I'm reviewing things offline, so I can't go into the code and see for myself, but did you use cite news for the news articles? The date being at the start of so many of the references seems off to me.
    • Can you be more specific about the problem? I stopped using citation templates about two years ago and now prefer no template at all. I'm not sure what you mean about the date. Viriditas (talk) 02:57, 9 May 2014 (UTC)Reply

Passing infobox, categories, "Further reading".

Image as OR? No.

Reading the talk page, I have no concern that this image research counts as original research. If this was an article about a dancer, and you were looking through photos of a performance, trying to figure out which person in the chorus line they were, I don't think it would be an issue. This is merely a case of being resourceful.

Good to know. Viriditas (talk) 02:57, 9 May 2014 (UTC)Reply

That said, the lead I always review the lead last, simply to see if there's anything mentioned in the article, that should be in the lead, that's not in the lead. Here, we've got the reverse.

There's no mention in the article proper about concern for the conditions of other animals in Central Park Zoo. There's no mention of the renovations that the incident sparked. There's no mention of attendance rates. There's no mention in the article proper about how Pattycake was a release valve for New Yorkers in a trying era.

This lead teases at a lot of content that could and should be reflected in the article. Please, whip up something relevant to this all, in the article proper. It looks like such content might have even existed already, given the to-do list. Mothers and Tigers? "Patty Cake Gorilla"? Paradigm shifts? -- Zanimum (talk) 23:35, 8 May 2014 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review. I will address your points and make the necessary edits. I do want to ask you about a few things you said, however, so that I'm clear on what needs to be done:
I will also address the rest of your points. I don't use citation templates in this article, but the dates should be fine. Viriditas (talk) 23:53, 8 May 2014 (UTC)Reply
Without looking at the wikicode, I would have never known. Kudos, on the cleanliness, it's just odd to have dates near the end. -- Zanimum (talk) 18:48, 10 May 2014 (UTC)Reply

This link isn't working, it's asking for a password: http://library.sandiegozoo.org/studbooks/primates/gorilla2010.pdf Is there a page that link to this document? The link is really the only thing to deal with. -- Zanimum (talk) 18:48, 10 May 2014 (UTC)Reply

I finally figured out how to get a URL for the PDF... Google was giving me their referral link, as opposed to the actual final URL, and the alternate host (Research Gate) wasn't letting me join without an academic email. I finally found the actual download page, and copied the link from there. It downloads properly now.

GA! -- Zanimum (talk) 20:13, 10 May 2014 (UTC)Reply