Talk:Patrick Blake (Hollyoaks)

Latest comment: 8 years ago by ONUnicorn in topic Plot summary and In Universe tags.

Plot summary and In Universe tags. edit

Yesterday I tagged this article with the plot summary and in universe tags. 188.30.16.159 responded by adding a section about how the domestic abuse storyline has had a real life impact, and removed the tags.diff

The domestic abuse section does help, along with the later quote about the importance of portraying MND on TV. But the issue I was pointing out with the tags isn't completely solved.

I've broken a couple paragraphs up so you things are a little clearer. I think the problem is primarily one of how the information in the article is organized, (or rather isn't) rather than there not being enough of it (though more wouldn't hurt). The article currently has a section called "Storylines" which is where I would expect to see plot summary. However, plot summary is scattered throughout the article. The section on "Casting and development" has exactly one sentence about casting - that being a quote from the actor about how pleased he is to be cast in that role - and then launches without warning into extended plot summary. It's not clear how that portion of plot summary is relevant there. Then there's the new section about reactions to domestic abuse, currently labeled as a sub section of the casting and development section, which doesn't talk about domestic abuse at all. Lastly, there is a secton on MND, which is by far the best section of the article. It has limited plot summary in the form of quotes about how they will introduce and develop the disease, followed by reaction from critics. At least 70% of the article is still plot, and at least 40% of the article takes an in-universe view. I'll see what I can do, though I'm not familiar with the show.~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 15:53, 2 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

I've made some changes to the organization of the article, and rephrased some things to try to separate fiction from reality. But I think it still could use work, so I'm leaving the tags. Diff ~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 16:14, 2 September 2015 (UTC)Reply
I have removed the tags, as I feel I have removed the issues that you have brought up. Although, I'll admit the casting can leave some to be desired, there's not really a lot out there. Yoshi876 (talk) 12:47, 9 September 2015 (UTC)Reply
It's a lot better. ~ ONUnicorn(Talk|Contribs)problem solving 16:11, 9 September 2015 (UTC)Reply