Talk:Pasir Ris MRT station/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Willbb234 (talk · contribs) 18:19, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

Happy to give this a review for GA. Expect comments soon. Kind regards, Willbb234^Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 18:19, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

Lede

• as part of the MRT eastern line extension to this station what does 'this station' refer to here?
• An incident happened in 2016 on the tracks away from the station which resulted in the deaths of two maintenance workers. I suggest changing this to An incident on the tracks in 2016 resulted in the deaths of two maintenance workers. for conciseness.
• an interchange with the Cross Island line (CRL) you should clarify that the CRL is upcoming and thus not currently in place.

History

• was awarded to Sato Kogyo Pte Ltd 'Ltd' needs a period after it as it is an abbreviation.
• on March 1986 'on' to 'in'.
• The contract also includes the construction the contract was agreed in the past and thus this should read 'included'.
• As announced by then-first deputy prime minister Goh Chok Tong he was the deputy prime minister, not the 'first deputy prime minister', see Deputy Prime Minister of Singapore. Also could do with a wikilink.
• the station opened on 16 December when the EWL extends to Pasir Ris. this sentence doesn't quite make sense; there are some tense issues.

Sorry, but I have found quite a few grammatical issues and have only read the first four paragraphs. I believe that this article needs quite a bit of work and copyediting in order to meet the first bullet point of WP:GACR. I will therefore fail this article as it is a long way from meeting one of the GA criteria. I recommend that you request a copyedit at the Guild of Copyeditors and then re-nominate, as I'm sure that the article will pass. I hope you understand, if you have any questions please get in contact. Willbb234^Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 22:02, 12 March 2021 (UTC)