Talk:Parupalli Kashyap/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: NapHit (talk · contribs) 20:10, 10 September 2012 (UTC)

Quick failing the article as does not meet a number of criteria.

• Lead is too short, see WP:LEAD, it should summarise all sections of the article which it does not do.
• "Because his father had a transferable job, their family kept moving frequently." needs a reference, what was the job that caused his father to move frequently, the reader needs context
• Too many short sentences which could be merged with others.
• Starting the majority of sentences with In and At is not writing to the standard required of a GA article
• Career section is not broad, hardly touches on any achievements. For example it is mentioned that he won a bronze medal at the Commonwealth Games, yet there is no further elaboration on this, which is representative of the section as a whole.

Failing on quality of the prose and broadness of the article. NapHit (talk) 20:10, 10 September 2012 (UTC)