Talk:Parnell Dickinson

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Wizardman in topic GA Review
Good articleParnell Dickinson has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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DateProcessResult
September 5, 2011Good article nomineeListed

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Parnell Dickinson/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Albacore (talk · contribs) 14:41, 5 September 2011 (UTC)Reply

Will review shortly. Albacore (talk) 14:41, 5 September 2011 (UTC)Reply
Comments:
  • In his first three seasons, he led the Southwestern Athletic Conference in total offense. I don't understand; what's "total offense"; total points? most yards gained?
  • After retiring from football, Dickinson became an insurance salesman and opened up two daycare centers. perhaps "up" should be removed here.
  • = sign in ref 23; is that supposed to be there?
  • In that game, Dickinson again came into the game, rushing three times... perhaps link rushing to Rush (gridiron football)#Offense
  • Dickinson returned two weeks later, failing to complete a pass for the Denver Broncos... might want to reword here, current wording might lead to some confusion (for the Denver Broncos led me to imply he was playing for them)
  • In the infobox, TDs-INTs should be TDs–INTs, and likewise 1-5 should be 1–5.

I'll be happy to pass this as a GA after these minor issues are taken care of. Albacore (talk) 15:57, 5 September 2011 (UTC)Reply

Fixed. Total offense is basically rushing and passing yards combined, found a link for that. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 16:21, 5 September 2011 (UTC)Reply