Talk:Paradigms of Human Memory/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 00:17, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 00:17, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Optional, but I suggest adding the {{Use American English}} and {{Use mdy dates}} templates for future reference.
  • Done.
• Is there a reason the first reference credits the end of the episode title as "human misery"?
  • I'm not sure. The copyright listing for the episode lists it under that title – maybe the episode's title changed between its creation and its airing, but I doubt that since the WGA listing submitted before the episode's airing is correct. My guess is there was a typo when submitting the copyright. At any rate, the airdate and other information is correct for this episode, so it's the right link.
• Various parameters are missing in the infobox, such as the cinematographer (Gary Hatfield) and editor (Peter B. Ellis).
  • I tried to follow H:IB here. Since the editor and cinematographer aren't mentioned anywhere, those parameters seem like trivial details for this article. Also, the other GAs for Community ("Pilot", "Remedial Chaos Theory", "Regional Holiday Music", and "Basic Lupine Urology"), as well as many other GAs in general (such as these four recent promotions), don't use those parameters, so I omitted them for consistency here per H:IB. I can certainly add those items if you still think they should be there.
• That being said, the lead summarizes the entire article so no issues there.

Plot

• "group are" → "group is" (referring to the whole group)
  • Done.
• With less than 400 words, the rest of the plot section looks good.

Production

• In prose, add year dates after Jaws and War of the Worlds.
  • Done. (Should the years be added in the lead and image caption as well? I personally don't think so, but I wanted to check.)

No, from what I've heard in the past you only add year dates in the body. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:16, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

• I would suggest mentioning that sets from Psycho (1960) were also used.
  • Done.
• Add a serial comma after "Jeff, Britta".
  • Done.

Cultural references

• A reference is needed to verify The Cape being a "short-lived superhero drama series".
  • Removed phrase and added "the television series" in front (so unfamiliar readers won't think it's a movie).
• The word "clumsy" doesn't seem neutral so I would remove it per WP:NPOV.
  • I pulled the word from source 16: "Abed is a bit clumsy as The Cape though and as he attempts to attack Jeff with his cape in the cafeteria, he instead knocks all the food off of Jeff’s tray."
• Recite references at the end of each quote per WP:QUOTE.
  • Done.
• Also add year dates to the shows mentioned here.
  • Done. (Also added dates for Inception and "Gravity".)

Reception

• Recite references at the end of each quote.
  • Done. (Though if a quote falls in the middle of a line, the citation is at the end of the sentence to prevent WP:OVERCITE, since the line would otherwise cite the same source twice.)
• With that in mind, this section looks good per WP:RECEPTION.

References

• Archive all archivable references (either manually or with this tool). Keep in mind that references from The Futon Critic can only be archived with archive.today.
• Mark references from The Atlantic with "|url-access=limited".
• Mark references from Vulture with "|url-access=limited".
• Mark references from Time with "|url-access=limited".
• Link Hollywood.com.
  • All done.

@Some Dude From North Carolina: I've responded to all of your comments above. RunningTiger123 (talk) 19:15, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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