Talk:Palm Springs Air Museum

Latest comment: 6 hours ago by C.Fred in topic COI edits may be salvageable?

88mm gun edit

Took the liberty of adding the 88mm gun to the list of artifacts, as it is the only such gun on the west coast of the US as far as I know. It can be seen in museum website photos, outside between the building and the parking lot. It is aparently a spanish-built model, made under license to the german company. WonderWheeler (talk) 07:45, 20 July 2008 (UTC)Reply

COI edits may be salvageable? edit

The changes to the intro sounded alarm bells of such magnitude that I reverted the edits wholesale. I'm thinking that at least some of the text may be salvageable. If any other editors would like to look at it and chime in, I welcome other eyes. —C.Fred (talk) 20:32, 8 May 2024 (UTC)Reply

Thank you for considering other opinions. I did work to resolve your concerns and subsequently posted a revision that also was pulled, by @Drmies. I believe I removed anything that could sound promotional and supported the factual nature of the statements with secondary sources. I further was correcting/updating old information to make the page accurate and more relevant/informative. I hope my last version can be reviewed and approved. If there are remaining issues, I would appreciate an opportunity to resolve them instead of having everything wiped out in one fell swoop. I have extensive writing and editing experience outside of Wikipedia; but this is a new process for me, so I am learning how things work on this platform and hoping this is the way to reach agreement on improving a Wikipedia page. BellamyBell (talk) 15:57, 20 May 2024 (UTC)Reply
@BellamyBell Your most recent edits on the article were four days ago, and they were again too promotional to use. My recommendation going forward is to work in smaller chunks, no more than a paragraph or two at a time, and to propose the edit here. I suggest including a {{edit COI}} tag to alert other users to your request and get them to review it. If it's accepted, then an independent editor can place the text in the article. —C.Fred (talk) 17:48, 20 May 2024 (UTC)Reply