Talk:Pakistan at the 2010 Winter Olympics

Latest comment: 5 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Pakistan at the 2010 Winter Olympics/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:31, 11 July 2018 (UTC)Reply

Will read this article and leave comments. MWright96 (talk) 08:31, 11 July 2018 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lead edit

  • "He was also the country's opening and closing ceremonies flag bearer." - change to Abbas was also the country's flag bearer in the opening and closing ceremonies.

Background edit

Alpine skiing edit

  • "He trained for two weeks in 2008 and six weeks in 2009 in Austria," - try and six weeks in Austria in 2009
  • " since he did not have money to compete in other competitions." - change to contest to avoid close reptition of the same word
  • "The event was supposed to start on February 21, but was postponed two days to allow for another event to take place." - source? and which event exactly?
    • Added the event and moved the reference closer to the material
  • "His total was 3:20.58, for 79th place overall," - total time

References edit

  • Reference 1 is missing the author who wrote it
  • Reference 7's publisher The Star needs to be in the work field

That's all from my side. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 17:38, 11 July 2018 (UTC)Reply

@MWright96: Think I got it all. Kees08 (Talk) 03:40, 12 July 2018 (UTC)Reply