Talk:Owha

Latest comment: 4 days ago by Jens Lallensack in topic GA Review

Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by AirshipJungleman29 talk 02:09, 6 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

  • ... that to avoid COVID-19 rule breaches, officials had to discourage people from posting a leopard seal's location online?
Created by Panamitsu (talk). Number of QPQs required: 1. Nominator has 43 past nominations.

Panamitsu (talk) 07:38, 5 August 2024 (UTC).Reply

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
  • Cited:  
  • Interesting:  
QPQ: Done.
Overall:   Everything looks good, but a little bothered by a Facebook source in the article. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 09:19, 6 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

GA Review

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Nominator: Panamitsu (talk · contribs) 08:08, 4 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 00:05, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Reading now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 00:05, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

  • The beginning of the article could do well with explaining that leopard seals are not regularly found in New Zealand.
  • Being known for what Stuff has described as – I suggest to add "the news media website", otherwise the reader is kind of forced to click on the link to learn what Stuff is.
It is not strictly required but a nice service for the readers. Take the featured article Knut (polar bear) as example, which has this sentence in the lead: the German tabloid newspaper Bild. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 10:54, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • The lead section does not summarize the entire article. It would be nice to have something from the "Calls for removal" and "Research" sections in there, too.
Looks good! --Jens Lallensack (talk) 10:54, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • The long form of her name, He owha nā ōku tūpuna, was given to her in 2016 by local hapū Ngāti Whātua ki Ōrākei – Does that mean that the short form was not given to her in 2016 by the local hapu? If it was, you could separate the first part from the second part to solve the issue (e.g., "The long form of her name, He owha nā ōku tūpuna, is Māori for "treasured gift from our ancestors". The name was given to her in 2016 by local hapū Ngāti Whātua ki Ōrākei."
  • She likes to sleep on pontoons,[7] which attracts – Shouldn't the article be in past tense?
Not sure. I would say "attracted" instead of "attracts", because we have no evidence that she still attracks these crowds. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 10:54, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • pontoons – wikilink terms in both the lead and body.
  • but they were unable to remove a hook – should this mean "one of the hooks"? Or is this about a different kind of hook?
  • In April 2022, the Department of Conservation (DOC), Auckland Zoo and LeopardSeals.org worked together to remove fishing hooks, – Also, "worked together to" is very unspecific. What exactly did they do? Did they catch and deafen her?
  • I would question the statement that leopard seals are "dangerous" as an overstatement, and that's also not what the source says (which says "seals are wild animals and will defend themselves if they feel threatened").
  • from a vagrant species in New Zealand to residents. – The plural (residents" does not match with the singular "a vagrant species"). Maybe "to a native species", depending what the source says?
  • I've changed the sentence to "... vagrant species in New Zealand to resident species," because the sources use "resident" and I'm not sure what the difference between a resident and a native species is. ―Panamitsu (talk) 04:27, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • In the box: "Height 3.1 m (10 ft) (length)". What does this mean? Height or length?
Yeah, remove, have a look at Knut (polar bear), which doesn't have the stuff. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 10:54, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • "400 kg (882 lb; 63 st 0 lb)" – Do we really need the "0 lb" here? Isn't "882 lb" enough?
  • I agree with you. I think it's a problem with the infobox template because the weight field accepts only a number instead of the convert template. I'm not sure if it's possible to fix it. ―Panamitsu (talk) 04:27, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
Remove, see above. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 10:54, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • I am worried about the term "Biography", can we really apply this to animals? Maybe use a more neutral title?
  • I'm a bit confused by this one because I had a look at the Cambridge Dictionary which defines biography as "the story of the life of a person written by someone else" (my emphasis), but I see some sources (eg [1]) which use "biography" with animals. I've changed this to "life" nonetheless. ―Panamitsu (talk) 04:54, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • "foreign objects in her mouth" – this is very unspecific. "Foreign" does not provide any information, you could just remove this word without loosing any information. One source at one point says "plastic object", maybe you can write "objects such as pieces of plastic" or similar to make this more specific.
Looks good! See a few replies above. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 10:54, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
All good now, promoting, and congrats! --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:07, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
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