Talk:One Ring/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 22:07, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

• "The Ring did not protect its bearer from destruction; Gollum perished in the Crack of Doom, and Sauron's body was destroyed in the downfall of Númenor. Like the Nine Rings, the One Ring physically corrupted mortals who wore it, eventually transforming them into wraiths. Hobbits were more resistant to this than Men: Gollum, who possessed the ring for 500 years, did not become wraith-like because he rarely wore the Ring" - You'll need to cite another chapter in addition to the Shadow of the Past, as Gollum's demise does not occur in that chapter.

Added.

• " Except for Tom Bombadil, nobody seemed to be immune to the corrupting effects of the One Ring, even powerful beings like Gandalf and Galadriel, who refused to wield it out of the knowledge that they would become like Sauron himself" - Again, the citation's a bit off, as Bombadil does not appear in that chapter

Indeed, the relevant chapter is the Council of Elrond.

• " In consideration of the trials of the Ring-bearers, the Valar allowed them to travel to the Undying Lands, accompanying Galadriel, Elrond, and Gandalf." - Rephrase this, as it makes it sound like Sam went at the same time as Frodo and Bilbo

Done.

• "As mortals, subject to the Gift of Men, they would eventually die and leave the world of Eä" - Gloss that the Gift of Men is death, as that's not assumed to be a gift by many people

Adjusted sentence.

• "In the 1981 BBC Radio serial of The Lord of the Rings, the Nazgûl chant the Ring-inscription" - Is there a better source for this? The source is literally just a sound file

Added a review.

• "A tabletop roleplaying game set in Middle-earth and called "The One Ring" was manufactured by Cubicle 7;[24] a new edition is planned by a partnership of Sophisticated Games and Free League Publishing from 2020" - Is it possible to source this to secondary sources, so somebody doesn't come around and call this promotional?

Added.

• There's a few primary sources in the secondary sources section. Can these get moved over to the primary sources?

Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:40, 4 November 2020 (UTC)

Good work, that's all I've got for GA level here. Hog Farm _Bacon 01:25, 4 November 2020 (UTC)