Talk:Now That You Got It/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by MarioSoulTruthFan in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 10:41, 26 April 2016 (UTC)Reply


Full review coming soon. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:41, 26 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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Flawless. Just put the year of "The Sweet Escape Tour" between brackets.   Done

Background and release

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  • "Swizz Beatz and he said he was working with Stefani as well" - re-write sentence. For example: "...and he said to be working with Stefani as well"

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  • "Two remixes were included on the CD single, both featuring Marley. The "remix" version is a more reggae-infused rendition, while the "hybrid" version features the song's original beat mixed with the remix version." - What do you mean with "hybrid"? Does it have the same instrumental as the single, different lyrics? Be precise.

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Composition and lyrics

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  • "The original version". How about the single version?

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  • I see no reference to the "reggae fusion" genre.

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  • Any digital sheet music?
  • Much like the case with Asking 4 It, there is no readily available sheet music on Sony ATV's website, or any other reliable source for that matter

Ok then.   Done

  • I was thinking about adding a sample, however, I'm unsure since it's maximum length would be, "0:15". What do you think?
You could include anyway. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:48, 4 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

Critical reception

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  • "and Sal Cinquemani of Slant Magazine called it "instantly contagious"." → and Sal Cinquemani, while reviewing the album, of Slant Magazine called it "instantly contagious".

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  • "Alex Miller of the NME, however"→ Before "Alex" needs a linking word that helps discern the "favorable" reviews from the "critics" one.

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  • "John Murphy of musicOMH was mixed" → I know what you mean, but you can't write it like this. It seems the reviewer is mixed, just like mixed nuts! "John Murphy of musicOMH gave the single a mixed review, writing". No need for "that".

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  • "making songs which are all strident and sleek and modern and shiny and brassy and tough on the outside, but which have a delicate core in the middle which is pure and vulnerable and nervous and a little timid" → use your own words.

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Commercial performance

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  • moderate success on the charts. In the United States, it was commercially unsuccessful..." → Needs an "however, nevertheless...". moderate success on the charts. Nevertheless, in the United States..."

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  • "her lowest-selling solo single" → How do you know? I don't see sales references.

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  • "In Australasia, the single performed very moderately..." → Full stop after moderately. It debuted at...

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Music video

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  • "part of The Sweet Escape Tour" → as part of The Sweet Escape Tour

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  • "Many parts of the video were shot in a studio." → any example

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  • " The video premiered on MTV's Total Request Live on September 4, 2007." → reference?

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Storyline

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  • "The chorus begins and Stefani, Harajuku Girls and Marley and playing board games under a shelter near the lake side." → "As the chorus begins Stefani, the Harajuku Girls and Marley are playing board games under a shelter near the lake side."

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  • "The video concludes with Harajuku Girls and the boys on the roof, Stefani and the girls singing on the scooters." → Doesn't flow well the part "on the roof, Stefani and the girls".

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  • Everything else is fine, but how about some sources to back up such description?

I don't see any description on the website you provided.   Not done

The official video is just fine. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:20, 19 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

Live performances

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  • "Stefani's first performance of the track was on the UK's television show Ant & Dec on September 29, 2007. She performed the original version of the song, but ended with a reggae mix". → other source that is not YouTube. The channel that uploaded that must have violated copyright issues.

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  • Any reviews regarding that performance?

"several critics appreciating the energy of the performance." → I see one critic.   Not done   Done

Track listings

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  • References? I see none.

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Credits and personnel

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  • I would link mastering, keyboards, mixing and so on. Only once each one of them.

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Charts

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  • Just fine.

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Release history

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  • You have a "scope="row"" in Europe, delete it.

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  • Find another source that is not Discogs. Not reliable.

  Done I removed it

References

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  • Some references have publisher and work, others only have work. Choose one of the options.

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  • Reference 23 is dead. Replace it and archive it.

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End of GA Review:

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@Carbrera: Gladly passing. Good luck on your GA cup. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:27, 19 May 2016 (UTC)Reply