Talk:Nina Demme/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Enwebb in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Enwebb (talk · contribs) 14:45, 9 June 2020 (UTC)
I'll take this one. I'll add some comments later today. Enwebb (talk) 14:45, 9 June 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
General comments edit
- Avoid calling the subject (and others) by their first names alone (MOS:SURNAME)
- Can you point to where the concern is? The only time I see reference to first name only is at her birth, where she was given only one name because the legalities of how to register her (and her siblings) hadn't been worked out. Sources are unclear as to why she was the only one of her siblings able to use forged documents to carry her father's surname, so it seemed important to point out that the surnames were different. SusunW (talk) 16:57, 10 June 2020 (UTC)
She was an illegitimate child of a polyamorous household which was made up of her father's first wife and nine children, and her mother and mother's children, who were Valya and Kolya by her first husband, a German surnamed Huber, and Nina, Julia, and Seryozha with her father.
can you split this into two sentences? It's a bit long
- Inconsistency in whether or not you're using an oxford comma (a bit nitpicky, not necessary for GA criteria but just pointing it out)
She was allowed to buy a summer house
allowed by whom?
- Nadezhda Krupskaya is identified as Lenin's wife in the lead but not in the body
- Might be nice to use {{convert}} for 5354 kg
Still need to do image checks, but I'll come back to this tomorrow. Enwebb (talk) 03:15, 10 June 2020 (UTC)
- Enwebb Thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it. The detailed photo analysis is on the talk page of the article, if that helps. Let me know if you need anything else or if I can help clarify anything. SusunW (talk) 16:57, 10 June 2020 (UTC)
and she married another of the scientists.
no name for her second husband? Enwebb (talk) 02:39, 12 June 2020 (UTC)
- Would that I knew. The Australian article was the only one that gave any time frame for any of the marriages. The family remembrances (see Note 2) were that her husbands were Ganya, Petr, Vanya, and Volodya. If I were guessing, since they remembered Petr best, he was last. And given name similarity Ivanov was probably Vanya and Ioylev probably Ganya, making the unknown one Volodya somebody, but that would be pure conjecture. I couldn't find any documents, sorry. SusunW (talk) 19:34, 12 June 2020 (UTC)
- Totally get real life complications, it's been crazy here too with a major tropical storm, but we survived it intact. Again I thank you Enwebb for your willingness to review and help improve the article. SusunW (talk) 19:34, 12 June 2020 (UTC)