Talk:Nicky Jam/GA1

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Reviewer: Truflip99 (talk · contribs) 18:50, 25 May 2020 (UTC)

Will start this soon. --truflip99 (talk) 18:50, 25 May 2020 (UTC)

• the latter three from his 2017 album Fénix. -- of which the latter three are*

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• He is also known for making romantic songs within the reggaeton genre.[1] -- I listen to his music and I would challenge this claim. Most reggaeton music is like this. Also, the ref you provided doesn't exactly support this statement. I suggest omitting altogether.

 Done I removed the sentence. I do think it is important to have information about his musical/lyrical style in the lead, but I will try to come up with something better. Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• the release of the singles "Voy a Beber" and "Travesuras" in 2014 -- duplicate link

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• His success was furthered by the 2015 single "El Perdón" and his 2017 album Fénix. -- dup link

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• Nicky Jam has also acted in the films XXX: Return of Xander Cage (2017) and Bad Boys for Life (2020) -- comma after this

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• Nick Rivera Caminero was born on March 17, 1981 -- comma after full date

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• in Lawrence, Massachusetts -- also good practice to link first instance of a wiki page in body

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• to a Dominican mother and Puerto Rican father. -- link DR and PR

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• Having been born on Saint Patrick's Day -- link St. Patty's Day

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• he developed an affinity for hip-hop -- link hip hop

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• However, in interview -- in an* interview

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• with Billboard -- link Billboard

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• Nicky Jam initially experienced culture shock -- link culture shock

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• having never spoken Spanish -- link Spanish language

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• was inspired to pursue a musical career. -- became* inspired

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• He also used Caribbean hip-hop and reggaeton -- link reggaeton

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• him to try cocaine -- link cocaine

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• little Mickey Mouse voice -- link Mickey Mouse

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• he continued to release the solo albums Haciendo Escante (2001) and Vida Escante (2004). -- Nicky Jam went on* to release

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• on-and-off -- I don't think you need the hyphens as this isn't a compound modifier

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

• This led an incensed Nicky Jam to release a diss track in response in 2004. -- 2004 redundant, use "that same year"?

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

More in a bit. --truflip99 (talk) 16:26, 28 May 2020 (UTC)

Thanks so much for your comments. I'll get right on it! Basilisk4u (talk) 00:39, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

Great progress! Continue:

• and soon after began touring together at the end of 2014. -- I would omit "soon after"

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

• His increased popularity during this time led to Nicky Jam reuniting -- led Nicky Jam to reunite*

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

• My bodyguard was like, ‘There's this woman outside. She's fighting with everybody saying she's your mom and she wants to see you... -- you forgot to close the quote

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

• The album reached the top of the Billboard Latin Rhythm Albums chart on February 11, 2017 -- comma after date

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

• to the new singles "El Amante" and "Si Tú la Ves" featuring Wisin of reggaeton duo Wisin & Yandel -- "Si Tú la Ves", the latter featuring...

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

• "sound has shifted from hard-hitting dembow...to more velvety rhythms and romantic lyrics." -- period after quote

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

• he recalls that "I knew automatically -- he recalls, "I knew..."

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

• The artist was first exposed to Caribbean music occurred upon -- The artist's first exposure to Caribbean music...

 Done Oh my goodness! Thanks for catching that. Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

• Jay-Z's The Blueprint (2001) "gave [him] an idea of how to do [his] albums in the Spanish market and give [his] fans that kind of vibe." -- period after quote

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

Good on prose. I will look at images and refs next. --truflip99 (talk) 21:02, 1 June 2020 (UTC)

• Awesome, thanks!! Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

Hey thank you so much for your comments. I am a teacher and am just finishing up the last week of virtual teaching. I will get to your comments as soon as possible! Basilisk4u (talk) 22:16, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

@Basilisk4u: Looking good!

• No license issues for pics
• Refs -- Link Billboard on first instance and remove any duplicates
• Add accessdate to refs 31 and 40

That should be it. Placing on hold. --truflip99 (talk) 15:09, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

Perfect, I made the changes and I think I caught all the duplicate Billboard links. Let me know if there's anything else I should do. Thanks so much for the review :) Basilisk4u (talk) 15:55, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

Looks great! Passing. --truflip99 (talk) 16:08, 17 June 2020 (UTC)