Talk:Naji Marshall/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 10:54, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 10:54, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "Marshall attended two high schools and Hargrave Military Academy as a postgrad" - formal; postgraduate
  • Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:01, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• Wikilink points per game for those unfamiliar with basketball
  • Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:01, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

High school career

• "and now coaches basketball at an elementary school," - and is now a basketball coach to avoid WP:LIMITED in the Cincicatti Enquirer source
  • Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• "Marshall has five brother's and one sister" - brothers
  • Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• Wikilink point to Point (basketball), rebound to Rebound (basketball), assist to Assist (basketball) and steal to Steal (basketball) for those unfamiliar with basketball terms
  • To me this is excessive, but ok. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• "He led Eleanor Roosevelt to a 24–3 record" - The Washington Post has the record at 23–3
  • Good catch. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• "as a postgrad to improve his academics" - formal; postgraduate student
  • Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• "but committed to" - more complete but committed to playing college basketball for
  • Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• "He competed for DC Premier on the AAU circuit." - spell out AAU in full
  • I spelled it out and used AAU as a common abbreviation. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

College career

• "Marshall contributed 12 points and four rebounds in his collegiate opener" - formal; opening game
  • Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• Wikilink jump shot for those who are not versed in basketball
  • Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• "and notching four assists" - more formal; achieving
  • Changed to "dished out four assists". ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• "He was named to the Second Team All-Big East as a sophomore." - The Cincinnati Enquirer states league coaches named Marshall to this team and thus can be mentioned in this article
  • Ok. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• Wikilink Julius Erving Award
  • Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
• "He sat out a game against Western Carolina on December 18 with an illness." - you can state he had a stomach virus as mentioned by the Asheville Citizen Times
  • Changed to more specific. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

References

• "Xavier's Bluiett, Villanova's Brunson, Butler's Martin Unanimously Named All-BIG EAST" - try to avoid all capital letters per MOS:ALLCAPS
  • Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:18, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

Overall the main issues with the article are portions of the prose that are informal and some that is lacking in specific detail. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 11:28, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

• @MWright96: Thank you for your review. I have addressed your concerns. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:18, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
  • @Editorofthewiki: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 16:02, 1 March 2020 (UTC)