Talk:Mycena chlorophos/GA1

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 15:56, 10 September 2012 (UTC)

Great lead image- really draws you in. Review to follow. J Milburn (talk) 15:56, 10 September 2012 (UTC)

• "known in Japan as the night-light mushroom," I'm not so keen on this; I assume it breaks a MoS rule. Compare, for instance, to how Ring or Sailor Moon format their opening line. Further, as this is found in numerous countries other than Japan, including English speaking countries, I'm not really sure why their name is given precedence.

• I agree (sorry Rcej, I'm reverting your addition). Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

• "species "Agaricus cyanophos" in" Italics, presumably?

• Fixed. Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

• "near the same location as the type locality of M. chlorophos, a couple of weeks later." This isn't really clear. Later than what? Also, as you haven't explicitly mentioned a type location yet (only a lectotype declared many decades later) a reference to it may be confusing.

• Tried to reword this, does it make sense now? Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

• "Other luminescent species in this section are M. discobasis and M. marginata." Are these the only other luminescent species in the section?

• Yes. I think that these three luminescent section comprise the entire section, but my sources don't say that explicitly though. Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

• "and it is somewhat sticky, and" and and

• Fixed. Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

• "The thin gills are free or adnexed to a slight collar encircling the stem." Perhaps a little jargony? Also "processes".

• Simplified. Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

• "while the mycelium and stems" mycelia?

• Yup, fixed. Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

• "M. discobasis fruit bodies have paler caps, larger spores measuring 9.9 by 6.7 μm, and lack the short apical appendage found on M. chlorophos cheilocystidia." This needs to be rephrased a little; perhaps splitting it into two sentences would be helpful.

• Tweaked. Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

• "and clamp connections with loops.[2]" What does this mean?

• Sounds like my paraphrasing probably made it not as self-explanatory (and perhaps inaccurate); I changed it back to the source's "loop-like clamp connections". Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

• There are some stunning (free) images here, if you fancy them- including some showing what it looks like when it's not dark and glowing.

• I've seen those, but there's some debate whether it's actually M. chlorophanos (note different spelling), a species purportedly found in Australia that does not yet seem to have been validly published. I've asked Casliber to look up an Australian source for me and may add a picture from here when I have more details. Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

• Sources look fine.

It'd be great to use the stamp image (it's here, if you fancy using Template:External image or something) but I couldn't find any information about the copyright status of Samoan stamps on a quick search (funny, that). Generally a strong article, as ever. J Milburn (talk) 16:30, 10 September 2012 (UTC)

• I hadn't seen that, thanks. I'll dig around and see if I can find out about Samoan stamp copyright, and may use this. Thanks again for a helpful review! Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

• Based on this I get the impression that Samoan stamps published after 1962 are under Crown copyright. Sasata (talk) 16:28, 11 September 2012 (UTC)

Ok, thanks for the tweaks, I'm happy to promote this now. J Milburn (talk) 18:25, 12 September 2012 (UTC)