Talk:Mountlake Terrace, Washington/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 15:47, 8 May 2020 (UTC)

Since I can't go anywhere now, might as well review something and feel like I've traveled a bit!

• Should Washington be linked in the first sentence?
  • Partially fixed by un-piping the county link. A separate link to the state would be overlinking.
• "land was logged by 1900 and was later subdivided into 10 acres (4.0 ha) chicken ranches, which were sold to farmers." - grammatically, I think "acres" should be singular, unless I'm misreading it
  • Fixed.
• "Judge Richard A. Ballinger purchased Lake McAleer in 1901 and renamed it to Lake Ballinger for his father, later leaving the area to become Seattle mayor.[" - this is the first mention of this lake, so perhaps give it a bit more context?
  • Added an earlier mention.
• "It was abandoned after the war, despite plans to expand it for civilian aviation, and acquired by real estate developers Albert LaPierre and Jack Peterson in 1949.[" - I think this should be split in two sentences after "aviation"
  • Not done, as it would create a weird sentence fragment.
• "Geiser loaned $5 (equivalent to $38 in 2018 dollars)[10] to the city government to file an incorporation charter with the state government, which was issued on November 29 and delivered the following day.[" - I appreciate this random, but important detail in the city's history!
  • It caught my eye and should make for a fine DYK hook.
• "As a result, one shopping center took 20 months to reopen and another was closed permanently." - I suggest you say "the other" instead of "another", since the previous sentence made it clear that the arson affected the two centers
  • Fixed.
• "resulting in the closure of local schools and the post office" - all local schools?
  • Not all, but being a multi-city district there was a reshuffle.
• You mention "plans for two casinos", and the "Economy" section mentions one casino. When did it open? Is it significant enough to mention?
  • The second one isn't significant enough; the first only appears because it has a relatively large number of employees.
• You link Mountlake Terrace High School three times in the article, so double check for overlinking
  • Removed one link, but the others are necessary and warranted by MOS:DL as being helpful to readers.
• "The city council also appoints citizens to serve on three advisory boards: the Arts Advisory Commission, Civil Service Commission, Community Policing Advisory Board, Neighborhood Parks Improvement Subcommittee, Planning Commission, Recreation and Parks Advisory Commission, and Salary Commission." - that's more than three
  • Fixed.
• "A local weekly newspaper, named The Enterprise, published a dedicated Mountlake Terrace edition from 1958 to 2009 and ceased publication in 2012." - what happened from 2009 to 2012?
  • Fixed. It was downsized to a single edition for all cities and then died out.

This is a really good article. I enjoyed the read, and, if you couldn't tell from my review, generally only found some nitpicks. Please let me know if you have any questions. Cheers - ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:47, 8 May 2020 (UTC)

@Hurricanehink: Thanks for the review. SounderBruce 19:12, 8 May 2020 (UTC)