Talk:Mortal Folly and Mortal Recoil

GA Review

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Reviewer: Khanassassin (talk · contribs) 18:34, 31 August 2013 (UTC)

Ayo, foo', I'm 'bout to take a look @ dis article so get ready 4 da review. --Khanassassin ☪ 18:34, 31 August 2013 (UTC)

Lead

• Perhaps link "Mortal Recoil" in the last paragraph? Everything else is fine, though. --Khanassassin ☪ 18:35, 31 August 2013 (UTC)

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 18:32, 5 September 2013 (UTC)

Plot

• "interrupted by the Ice King, who gets trying to get Finn and Jake's blessings to date Bubblegum." I think you know what's wrong here, haha. --Khanassassin ☪ 18:51, 31 August 2013 (UTC)

  Whoops. Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 18:32, 5 September 2013 (UTC)

Production

• Everything's cool here, actually. Good work. --Khanassassin ☪ 18:51, 31 August 2013 (UTC)

Reception

• Although I copy-paste from the the "Mortail Recoil", it's good. Have you considered merging the articles: you would keep the reception section pretty much the same, while making an overall beefier article, and the two episodes are tightly connected anyway. Only a suggestion though, it would make sense. --Khanassassin ☪ 18:51, 31 August 2013 (UTC)

  It's true that the last paragraph is very similar; most reviewers saw the episodes as kind of one. However, the production section might be a little hard to redesign, since each episode was storyboarded by a different team of writers, and so they each talked about their respective episodes in the commentary. If I can't find any more episode-specific reception articles, I may very well have to merge.

References There's one citication eror (ref. #13), but it's cool. Not a part of this section, but an external section would be cool; not mandatory, though. --Khanassassin ☪ 18:51, 31 August 2013 (UTC)

• I think its fixed now.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 18:32, 5 September 2013 (UTC)

Fix all of these up, and you shall pass. --Khanassassin ☪ 18:51, 31 August 2013 (UTC)

• I think I fixed or explained all the issues.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 18:32, 5 September 2013 (UTC)
  • Cool, me gon' pass dis artikel. Passin it yo. --Khanassassin ☪ 14:35, 6 September 2013 (UTC)

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Ref problem

Hi, Gen. Quon, just in case you didn't see there's a problem on the current sixth reference. You duplicated "muto" reference. I almost merged them but then I saw that one is the commentary for "Mortal Folly" and the other for "Mortal Recoil". I would fix it by myself but I don't know which one is you citing in the first two sentences of the second paragraph of "Production". Regards, Gabriel Yuji (talk) 22:22, 10 June 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the heads up! I believed I've fixed it.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:39, 11 June 2016 (UTC)

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