Talk:Morphia of Melitene/GA1
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Reviewer: Borsoka (talk · contribs) 16:16, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
I am glad that I have the opportunity to review this nice article about a nearly unknown medieval queen consort. Borsoka (talk) 16:16, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Congratulations for this excellent article. Thank you for completing it. Borsoka (talk) 17:12, 14 November 2023 (UTC)
Background edit
...the city of Melitene (Malatya) in northern Syria I would mention that the city is now in Turkey.- Ah, yes, I knew I was missing something. It is not in MOS but I now remember seeing it done like that in the articles you worked on. But what to do then about Harpoot, Jerusalem, Bethlehem, etc? It might look odd to specify this only for Melitene; or perhaps not because Melitene is the one with which she is identified. Surtsicna (talk) 19:38, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
Although ethnically Armenians, the family practised the Greek Orthodox faith. I think the sentence is unclear for many readers who do not know that the Armenians adhere to their own Church.
Why Middle East instead of Near East or Levant?
Linking of the term "Franks" to the whole article is not helpful. Perhaps section "Crusaders and other Western Europeans as "Franks"" should be linked.
... region's indigenous Christian nobility... I would not include the term "nobility" in the link.
...including the Armenians... As far as I remember the crusader aristocrats only sought marriage alliances with the Armenians because only the lifestyle of the leaders of other native Christian groups did not resemble to western chivalry.
...another crusader, Baldwin of Bourcq... Was he a simple crusader?
Marriage edit
...was probably celebrated in 1100 Could this PoV be attributed to a scholar?
Queenship edit
His cousin King Baldwin I... According to Alan V. Murray: "Whilst the older scholarship seemed certain that Baldwin II was a nephew or first cousin of Godfrey and Baldwin I, the most recent detailed research has demonstrated that a relationship as close as these must be discounted..." Murray, Alan V. (2017). "Kingship, Identity, and Name-giving in the Family of Baldwin of Bourcq". In Housley, Norman (ed.). Knighthoods of Christ: Essays on the History of the Crusades and the Knights Templar, Presented to Malcolm Barber. Taylor and Francis. pp. 27–38 (on page 27). ISBN 9781351923927.
Baldwin II delayed his coronation for almost a year and a half so that he could be crowned together with his wife. Is this a fact or a scholarly PoV?
- Funnily enough, Hamilton explicitly calls this a fact: "Matthew of Edessa remarks that Baldwin was devoted to his wife and this is borne out by the fact that he delayed his coronation for almost eighteen months, until Christmas day 1119, so that she could travel to Jersualem and be crowned with him." Surtsicna (talk) 00:34, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
Barber mentions possibilites to explain the delay of Baldwin's coronation although he also says that Baldwin most likely "wanted a joint coronation with his wife" (Barber (2012), pp. 119-120). I think a reference to Matthew of Edessa would be useful, and the article could mention that scholars accept Matthew's explanation.Borsoka (talk) 02:51, 11 November 2023 (UTC)- Barber discounts the other reasons though. When he explains the wish for a joint coronation as the "most likely" reason, he cites William of Tyre; Hamilton, who presents it as a fact, cites Fulcher of Chartres. I am not sure which of the chroniclers should be referenced, but it seems that there is a consensus among the scholars. Surtsicna (talk) 23:45, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
- Funnily enough, Hamilton explicitly calls this a fact: "Matthew of Edessa remarks that Baldwin was devoted to his wife and this is borne out by the fact that he delayed his coronation for almost eighteen months, until Christmas day 1119, so that she could travel to Jersualem and be crowned with him." Surtsicna (talk) 00:34, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
The Orthodox clergy's status in the kingdom improved during Baldwin II's reign... Could some examples be mentioned?
...they may have been privileged because the queen herself was Orthodox Could this PoV be attributed to a scholar?
Historian Bernard Hamilton speculates... Does he speculate or write/state/propose?
Death and legacy edit
...it must have been between 1126 and 1128 Why and according to whom?Barber writes that if Morphia died, in 1126 "this is in itself might have been a significant reason for seeking a husband for Melisende". (Barber (2012), p. 394 (note 159))...and her own sons, Baldwin and Amalric, also married Orthodox women Is this necessary? (Is there a connection between their grandmother's and their wives' Orthodoxy?)Borsoka (talk) 17:17, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- I will elaborate on the dating. I've removed the granddaughters-in-law; Hamilton is far too vague for me to be any clearer, and I also do not feel like naming them (which I probably should if I keep the reference to them). Surtsicna (talk) 00:38, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
- I have expanded the section to discuss the dating of her death. Surtsicna (talk) 10:15, 12 November 2023 (UTC)
Pictures edit
File:Map Crusader states 1102-en.svg is missing a reference to a reliable source.
- I replaced that one with File:Map County of Edessa 1098-1131-en.svg. Same author, but cited sources. I would prefer to show all the crusader states in the immediate aftermath of the First Crusade in one map but it seems that we have no such reliable map with a reference. On the bright side, this one shows Melitene. Surtsicna (talk) 11:55, 12 November 2023 (UTC)
File:609 - Jerusalem - Church of the Virgin.JPG is missing a source and a US copyright tag.Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
- The uploader scanned the photo of a postcard produced by Lehnert & Landrock, who are named in the file information. The eBay seller of the postcard does not have it on their profile anymore, but I included a link to the profile of another seller of the same postcard. Now, I am not sure which of the US PD criteria listed at commons:Template:PD-Egypt/en this file is supposed to fit. I have requested help at the Commons. Surtsicna (talk) 11:55, 12 November 2023 (UTC)
- Sorted out. Surtsicna (talk) 12:41, 12 November 2023 (UTC)
Lead edit
The main text says that she died between 1126 and 1128, the lead and the infobox mentions the years 1126 and 1127.
She was Armenian, although followed the Greek Orthodox religion. I think this is unclear for our readers.
Her father, Gabriel, ... I think he should be introduced as an Armenian aristocrat/leader/warlord in northern Syria.
...one of the crusaders... Perhaps crusader leaders?
...c. 1100... I would say "around" or "in about 1100" in the lead.
Her religious practices left a lasting mark on the status of Orthodox Christians in the crusader kingdom. In the main text, this is not a fact but a scholarly PoV.Borsoka (talk) 03:18, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
Notes edit
- Barber says that, according to Mayer, "Morphia was the first queen to be crowned in the crusader kingdom". I suppose that could be interpreted as meaning that Arda and Adelaide were crowned outside the kingdom, but this is obviously not Barber's intention. Mayer in his work says that Baldwin II's wives were never crowned. I suppose it could be reworded to: "Morphia was the first queen of Jerusalem to undergo the ceremony in the Kingdom of Jerusalem", but that is awkward and implies that previous queens were crowned outside the kingdom; or to "Morphia was the first queen to undergo the ceremony in the Kingdom of Jerusalem", but that risks losing a valuable link. Surtsicna (talk) 18:14, 13 November 2023 (UTC)