Talk:Mission: Impossible (1998 video game)/GA1
Latest comment: 6 years ago by Niwi3 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 05:07, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
I'll take this one. Cognissonance (talk) 05:07, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
Plot edit
"by infiltrating the submarine pen and destroying the submarine" Avoid repetition: "by infiltrating the base and destroying the submarine"."steals one half of the CIA non-official cover (NOC) list, a list that gives the real and false names" Avoid repetition and clarify: "steals one half of the CIA non-official cover (NOC) list, which holds the real and false names"."find and save the NOC list" "save" doesn't quite do it, wouldn't "assemble" suffice?"Hunt finds Barnes dead in an office and rescues Parker" Then you can use "save" instead of "rescue" to avoid repetition.
Overall edit
Too few notes to not do myself. Promoted. Cognissonance (talk) 09:53, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
- @Cognissonance: Thank you for your review and great copy-edits. Niwi3 (talk) 20:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)