Talk:Minneapolis Domestic Violence Experiment/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:57, 13 May 2012 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:57, 13 May 2012 (UTC)

First off, given the size of the article I think the lead should be lengthened. Try to make it two nice paragraphs; I'll continue with the review once that happens. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:12, 14 May 2012 (UTC)

I'll get on that ASAP! BobAmnertiopsis∴_ChatMe! 05:40, 15 May 2012 (UTC)

Hey. I'm still conscious of this...I've just had a ridiculously busy week. Fear not, though, for I'll get to it soon. BobAmnertiopsis∴_ChatMe! 12:19, 21 May 2012 (UTC)

I understand; had one as well, usually I'm already done with the review by now. I'll try to get to it in the next couple days. To go with the lead request, have a cite where there's a citation needed tag before I get to finishing the review. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 02:40, 22 May 2012 (UTC)

Review finally done. Here's the issues:

• "was a study done in 1981-1982" done from 1981 to 1982 sounds a bit nicer, but that's more my preference than an actual issue.
• "Also, the Violence Against Women Act of 1994 added to the fight for legislation in the 1990s in the states without mandatory arrest laws." this sentence feels a little off, like it has a different tone than the rest of the section; could it be reworded?
• "The debate over Mandatory Arrest is still underway" not sure why that's capitalized here.
• Some of the references need publisher information and accessdates, namely 20 and 21.
• The two citation needed tags needs to be addressed. One was already on the page, one I added.
• As noted above, expand the lead.
• Ref 18 generates "Your request cannot be processed by the Ministry of Justice website" Bob1960evens (talk) 20:21, 13 June 2012 (UTC)
• Ref 21 generates a "Page not found" error. Bob1960evens (talk) 20:21, 13 June 2012 (UTC)

There's not too much to fix. I'll put the article on hold for seven days and will pass upon it being fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:28, 26 May 2012 (UTC)

Would you be able to fix the issues by Monday? We're at a week since the above comments and only the first has been fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:57, 1 June 2012 (UTC)

I'll shoot to have as many of them fixed by then as possible. Thanks for your patience. BobAmnertiopsis∴_ChatMe! 05:52, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

Okay, finally getting to this. BobAmnertiopsis∴_ChatMe! 20:15, 7 June 2012 (UTC)

Unrelated to this review, but "from 1981 to 1982" is specified in the MoS. Chris857 (talk) 02:27, 9 June 2012 (UTC)

Noted; I'm putting a hard deadline of the 14th on fixing the issues since they are rather minor. I'll either pass or fail on that date. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:48, 9 June 2012 (UTC)

I've allowed enough time for this, and now that extra issues have been found, I unfortunately have to fail this. If everything is fixed later on, it can always be re-nominated at that time. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 22:28, 13 June 2012 (UTC)

• Yes, it really should include its relationship/influence/ effect on the Duluth Model which had a huge effect on police practices and was adopted by many states, including Florida as policy. MathewTownsend (talk) 23:01, 13 June 2012 (UTC)