Talk:Michael Pineda/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Resolute in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Resolute (talk · contribs) 02:02, 12 April 2012 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
General
  • Images are good
  • Sources look good
    • Spotcheck of sources shows no issue with close paraphrasing
      • Reply I'll certainly add alt text.
  • Is there anything that can be said about his personal life? Where he grew up, family, was he involved in any sort of team/charitable causes, etc?
    • Reply Sadly, not much. This is about as much as I can find. I added a short section on his personal life based on it.
Lead
  • "...the highest among MLB rookies with at least 100 innings pitched.[1] and fourth overall in MLB.[2]" - Obviously that period was supposed to be a comma.
    • Reply Yes, indeed.
Minor leagues
  • "...and was named Mariners Minor League Pitcher of the Year." - and he was named. Also, specify that this was a team award. Tacked onto the other award, it is implied that Baseball America named him Seattle's minor league pitcher of the year.
  • Need a citation for his statistical accomplishments in 2009
  • "...Baseball America again named Pineda the Mariners' Minor League Pitcher of the Year in 2010" - source does not say Baseball America named him pitcher of the year. States it was a team award?
    • Reply First item clarified, and you're right on the second. My bad.
Seattle Mariners
  • "He ended his first month in the majors with a 4–1 record and a sparkling 2.01 ERA..." - Avoid weasel words. "Sparkling" is not encyclopedic. Also, that entire line is one heck of a run-on sentence.
  • The all-star game paragraph needs a little re-work. You note he was named and why, then highlight his season stats to that point, then discuss a seemingly random single inning of work. I was a little confused for a moment before realizing you were talking about the All-Star game again.
  • "He recorded no wins in his final seven starts over the final two months of the year.." - final... final. Can you change up the wording a bit?
    • Reply I doubt I wrote "sparkling", but I'm surprised I didn't take it out before. Run-on cut in two. Clarified that the inning was ASG. Changed the second "final" to "last", I hope that suffices.


New York Yankees
  • Trades are important enough that I like to include the dates. Not a requirement, just a suggestion.
  • The date he went on the DL, however, is not. I might suggest rewording as "Pineda was placed on the 15-day disable list and missed the start of the season with tendinitis in his right shoulder."
    • Reply Date of the trade added, date of the DL removed.
Overall