Talk:Mi Reflejo/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Calvin999 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 10:59, 13 June 2013 (UTC)Reply

Lead
  • The tracks adapted and composed → The tracks were adapted and composed

  Done

  • on top of both charts. → at the top of both charts

  Done

  • platinum in country. → platinum in that country

  Done

  • It also peaked at number fifty-four in Switzerland and certified double platinum in Mexico. → I don't think this is needed tbh, plus it's a bit odd to say it peaked at 54 in Switzerland and certified double platinum in Mexico in that construction.

  Done

  • Need a comma after Nielsen SoundScan

  Done

Background
  • After the huge success → By including 'huge' here, it sounds a bit WP:FANCRUFT and fan like. 'After the success' has the same impact without reading like a forum

  Done

  • found themselves pushing → Well, I doubt it's something they didn't want! Simply 'pushed' would do fine.

  Done

  • These opening sentences aren't making sense. I have changed it, because it just isn't flowing and it's easier for me to do this myself than explain each bit

  Done

  • markets also, the grow in the → markets also. The growth in the

  Done

  • something in which → something which

  Done

Composition
  • The former single peaked at number thirteen on the Billboard Hot Latin Songs chart while the latter single peaked at number six on the Hot Latin Songs and number two on the Billboard Latin Pop Songs chart. → This isn't composition and should be removed, it should go in the Singles section. (I haven't got that bit yet, so you might be repeating yourself).
Since they're weren't released as singles for this album, it wouldn't be appropriate for to the singles section.
They were previously released as single though. Composition is the complete wrong section. Chart positions have nothing to do with composition.  — AARONTALK 09:30, 21 June 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • and including a system → and included a system

  Done

Commercial performance
  • chart succeeded → chart and replaced (I think this is what you mean)

  Done

Track listing
  • What's the point of the Music column?

  No idea. It was there before I revamped this article. Removed.

Charts

I made some amendments and MOS changes.

Thanks! :)
References
  • Look great :)
Again, thanks! :)
Status

On hold.  — AARONTALK 21:19, 18 June 2013 (UTC)Reply

  Doing... Thanks for the review! Sorry about the delay, college has been keeping me busy. Erick (talk) 06:54, 20 June 2013 (UTC)Reply
I believe I've addressed every issue brought up. EDIT: What the heck? My edit didn't save. =\ Give me one minute. EDIT2: Okay, I've got it this time. Erick (talk) 03:48, 21 June 2013 (UTC)Reply
Okay. Passing.  — AARONTALK 09:30, 21 June 2013 (UTC)Reply
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