Talk:Meratus white-eye/GA1
Latest comment: 4 days ago by Starsandwhales in topic GA Review
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Nominator: AryKun (talk · contribs) 09:28, 26 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Starsandwhales (talk · contribs) 02:11, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
Hello! I'll be reviewing this article over the next few days/weeks. starsandwhales (talk) 02:11, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
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- In the lead - "It is endemic to the Meratus Mountains of Indonesian Borneo, where it has been recorded from Mount Besar and Mount Karokangen". The phrasing with "from" is awkward, has its presence been recorded (as in documented) on both of these mountains or has it been audio recorded on both of these mountains? Other than this point of confusion the lead looks good.
- Taxonomy section reads well — Preceding unsigned comment added by Starsandwhales (talk • contribs) 20:22, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
- Description - "The Meratus white-eye is a typical Zosterops white-eye with deep olive-green upperparts, more yellow underparts, a yellow stripe across the lores, and a distinctive bicoloured bill" link for lores?
- Description - "The bill is mostly pinkish-horn, with the upper ridge of the maxilla and the tip of the mandible being a darker greyish-horn." link for maxilla?
- Description - "Compared to the Javan white-eye, the only other Bornean white-eye that is uniformly yellow or olive, the Meratus white-eye is darker overall, with a longer bill and tail and thinner, less yellowish line above the lores." This sentence should be restructured to have fewer comma-separated clauses, it's difficult to parse.
- Description - "The white-eye's usual call is a high, "buzzy" 'zip'." consistent quotation marks
- Ecology and conservation - "It diet is unknown, but it has it has been seen in mixed-species foraging flocks with other insectivores." -> Its diet is unknown...
- Ecology and conservation - " It has a very small range and the authors of the study describing it recommended it be assessed as vulnerable due to its restricted distribution and pressure due to the songbird trade." unclear wording
starsandwhales (talk) 22:43, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
- Infobox - While not necessary, alt text on the image improves accessibility